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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by Matthewedwards 08:17, 31 January 2009 [1].

List of Vampire Knight episodes edit

Another episode list. Co-nom with Collectonian. — sephiroth bcr (converse) 09:54, 15 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Support, all issues resolved. Dabomb87 (talk) 16:26, 19 January 2009 (UTC) [reply]
Resolved issues, Dabomb87 (talk)

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

  • "Yuki Cross' earliest memories are being attacked by a vampire, and saved by the pureblood vampire Kaname Kuran." Time-lapse issue: Are these events simultaneous or does one happen after the other?
  • "Yuki attempts to stop them, and they only retreat after Zero arrives and threatens them with his anti-vampire gun, Bloody Rose. " "only" should be as late in the sentence as possible: "only retreat"-->retreat only.
  • "Meanwhile, Zero ponders shooting himself with his anti-vampire gun, and he is stopped by Yuki."
  • "Yuki goes to Zero, and he explains a previous incident he had with a Level E" "explains"-->describes. One cannot "have" an incident.
  • "Yuki convinces Yagari to leave, and he tells Zero that Shizuka Hio is still alive. "
  • "Zero awakens and greets Shizuka's servant, realizing he is Ichiru. " Add "that" after "realizing".
  • "who claims he "-->who claims that he
  • "Shizuka goes to Kaname's room, and he pierces her heart with his hand."
  • Isn't the "he" necessary to indicate the change in subject (as Kaname is doing the heart-piercing)? — sephiroth bcr (converse) 22:34, 17 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Probably. In these anime articles, I don't understand what is going on half the time! :/ Dabomb87 (talk) 22:47, 17 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "However, she was in love with a human that turned into a vampire" "that"-->who. Comma after "vampire".
  • "Ichiru leaves with Shizuka's body and when he meets Zero, relates the hatred he feels for him." Missing subject pronoun before "relates".
  • "and later confides her guilt concerning Zero's pain to Kaname." "concerning"-->about.
  • "Yuki claims she will not speak to him"-->Yuki claims that she will not speak to him
  • "He kisses her as thanks"-->He kisses her in gratitude
  • "He lies down beside her, and asks her"
  • "Kaname claims he would never do anything of the sort to her. " What wouldn't he do?
  • "a scene Hanabusa witnesses."-->a scene witnessed by Hanabusa. or a scene that Hanabusa witnesses.
  • "Yuki claims she could never hate him"-->Yuki claims that she could never hate him
  • "Ichiru reveals that he was injured attempting"-->Ichiru reveals that he was injured from (during?) attempting
  • "however, Ichijo kills him."-->Ichijo kills him instead.
  • "ultimately will kill Yuki"-->will ultimately kill Yuki
  • "Meanwhile Senri and Rima are looking for Takuma. " Comma after "Meanwhile".
  • "The first DVD compilation for the second season episodes is schedule for January 28, 2009." Wrong tense of "schedule".
Dabomb87 (talk) 22:03, 17 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Sources look good. Dabomb87 (talk) 22:03, 17 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Think that's it. — sephiroth bcr (converse) 22:34, 17 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from Truco

Comments from Truco (talk · contribs)

  • Dabomb got all my prose comments, but the only thing is that the article should be update because (at the time of this review) its is the 28th of January, the day the DVD is to be released, so did they release or what. An update is needed.TRUCO 20:14, 28 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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