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The list was not promoted by SchroCat 10:38, 3 July 2014 (UTC) [1].[reply]

List of Neuro: Supernatural Detective episodes edit

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Nominator(s): Gabriel Yuji (talk) 00:36, 19 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Well, I looked to other anime and manga-related FLs to improve this one. And, it just passed for a copyediting by @Miniapolis:. I think it's in a reasonable state, and all critics would be helpful to improve it more to reach FL... Gabriel Yuji (talk) 00:36, 19 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by DragonZero

Only did a quick ref check.

  • You should cut back on foreign titles. Instead of "第2話「集【コミュニティ】」", why not just episode 2... etc...
  • Done
  • Are source 1 to 3 just repeating the same information from different sources? I'd say it is excessive but it shouldn't impact FL.
  • Hm, in fact, I added all three because there's some divergence between them. But actually it isn't necessary.
  • Last paragraph in lead should be rewritten.
  • How about it?
  • The main issue is here "The series has two pieces of theme music: an opening and an ending." Not a good sentence to use since there is only a single opening and ending theme. The whole last paragraph can rewritten into a single sentence.

I'll check the prose when I can. DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 11:39, 25 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your comments. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 23:43, 25 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Majin Tantei Nōgami Neuro" is used throughout the article even though a licensed title for it is out. There might be a lot of work needed to fix the flow in order to address this point.
  • "Nōgami" Is that how it is in Viz's subtitles?
  • Episode 1
Why not introduce the full names for the detectives and link them to their section.
threatening letters -> threats.
I'm going to have to think whether I can support this list or not due to the summary style and it being a mystery series. This would be how I'd summarize the first episode, from memory. Neuro Nogami, Yako Katsuragi, and two detectives named Something Sasazuka and Something Ishigaki, are asked by a restaurant owner to investigate threats he received; during their discussion the chef is found dead in the kitchen. After investigating, Neuro reveals the owner to be the culprit. He explains the chef was killed before their arrival and was propped up by ropes held together with a frozen fruit to give the impression he was still alive; when the fruit thawed, the body would fall and give the owner an alibi. The owner confesses after the rolling pin used for the murder is found, explaining how the victim learned the owner was using drugs in the food, and is apprehended by Neuro when he attempts to attack the group. DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 10:35, 1 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I guess I've fixed the two first points, but to rewrite the summaries is something that would take more time. So, I'm not sure I can do it in time (not sure how many time a FLC last too) if you decide that another summary style is necessary. However, I think that your summary style for the first was extremely superior and I thought about it to realize the flaws of the current style. Anyway, thanks. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 00:23, 3 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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