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The list was promoted by PresN via FACBot (talk) 00:31, 20 July 2016 (UTC) [1].[reply]

List of Formula One Grand Prix wins by Michael Schumacher edit

List of Formula One Grand Prix wins by Michael Schumacher (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)

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Nominator(s): Cowlibob (talk), The Rambling Man (talk) 06:37, 30 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Joint nom, Cowlibob did the hard bits, I tweaked around the edges. A comprehensive list of the victories of one the greatest F1 drivers of all time. The Rambling Man (talk) 06:37, 30 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comments:
    • As the European Grand Prix moves, it could be helpful in the lead to say the course of the 1997 controversy.
    • The 2000 Canadian entry says "Canadian Grand Prix", the others say simply "Canadian"
    • It might be nice to have other tables underneath for his number of wins by each season and event, but I won't mark you down if you consider that to be too crufty.
      • I'm leaning support, I'll hear your comments. '''tAD''' (talk) 02:24, 31 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Hello tAD, I've addressed the first two comments, I'm not overly keen on bunches and bunches of summary tables that are simply synthesised from the main table. Cowlibob may feel differently, we'll see. Thanks for your comments! The Rambling Man (talk) 06:15, 31 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
I don't mind if the additional tables are not included. Support '''tAD''' (talk) 06:46, 31 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • "in a season in which he won eight races." don't think the first in is necessary here
  • "His victory was controversial as when leading the championship he had been involved in a collision with fellow championship contender Damon Hill at the final race in Adelaide which resulted in both drivers retiring their cars." This is a very long sentence with no punctuation, I think a comma is needed after controversial and after Adelaide.
  • "He won his second the following year..." Need to be explicit here, readers could interpret this wrong. Be clear it was his second championship.
  • A lot of the sentences start with "In..." I would try and change this up a little to improve readability.
  • " in a season in which he won nine races. no need for the first in
  • "...with a consecutive four more championships." Not the best prose I would change to He followed this with fou consecutive championships from 2001 to 2004.
  • "Schumacher broke Alain Prost's record for the most Grand Prix wins." Maybe state the number of victories that Prost had to give some context to the reader.
  • "His 2002 season in which he was on the podium in every race included eleven race victories which broke the record for most in a single season." Another sentence that could do with some punctuation. After 2002 season and every race there should be commas, the last part of the sentence doesn't read too well. I would try and change it up a little.
  • ref 63 seems to be a publication, Atlas F1 and should include this in the ref, with the volume numbers etc.

NapHit (talk) 09:12, 10 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@NapHit: Thanks for the input. Have made edits to the article, hopefully looks better now. Let me know what else you'd suggest. Cowlibob (talk) 17:37, 11 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
I've copyedited the lead and am happy to support the nomination. Great work. NapHit (talk) 22:15, 11 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from Giants2008 (Talk) 19:04, 9 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Comments –
  • If it were me writing this, I'd dump "an impressive" from the second sentence. For that to not come off as POV, you'd have to explain that seventh is good for a first-time driver, and it's not worth the room it would take up in a lead of this nature.
  • Comma before "at the end of the season he retired from Formula One" should be a semi-colon instead.
  • Same for the comma before "the majority of his race victories were for the Ferrari team with 72."
  • Wins: "The position on the grid from Schumacher started the race." Grammar needs a tweak here. The Ayrton Senna lists uses "at which" in place of "from", which might work. Giants2008 (Talk) 22:14, 5 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Giants2008: Thanks for the comments. I think I've sorted them. Cowlibob (talk) 21:54, 8 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support – Now that the comments have been addressed, I'm confident that this lists meets the criteria. Giants2008 (Talk) 19:04, 9 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Source Review
  • Formatting: No problems
  • Spotchecks: Checked refs 8, 14, 46, 107 - all clean
  • Completeness: no problems noted

Source review passed, no outstanding opposes, closing as promoted. --PresN 14:41, 19 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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