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The list was promoted by Giants2008 10:01, 26 February 2014 (UTC) [1].[reply]
List of Code Geass: Lelouch of the Rebellion R2 episodes edit
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- Nominator(s): DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 01:44, 3 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Similar to the previous season, I'm hoping this can reach FL. The plot builds from the previous season so if there are accessibility issues to the general reader, I'll try to address them. DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 01:44, 3 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments by Haha169
| Resolved comments from DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 09:23, 21 February 2014 (UTC)[reply] |
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Phenomenal work! I have a few nit-picky things to list, but they are all very minor, so I'm going to offer my support for this list if these issues are addressed (or, of course, explained to me why there is nothing wrong in the first place):
Once again, good work! --haha169 (talk) 07:31, 9 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]
You might want to hold on the support in case there is some glaring error I missed. Thank you for the time though. DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 10:07, 10 January 2014 (UTC)[reply] |
Thank you for all of the changes you've made! Just one thing catches my eye. At the end of the first paragraph, you mention that R2 takes place after the first series, then you launch into a plot summary. As I have not watched this show, can you make it more clear as to whether the short plot summary refers to the first series or the R2 series? Otherwise, I support. --haha169 (talk) 18:26, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments by ChrisGualtieri
- Seems to be missing some commas in the summary of the episodes. Some more optional than others: "A year after the Black Rebellion, a brainwashed Lelouch Lamperouge and his younger brother Rolo are gambling at Babel Tower when The Black Knights<comma?> led by C.C.<comma?> launches an attack on the complex to retrieve Lelouch." and ". The Black Knights are overwhelmed by the Knightmare Frame Vincent<comma> but are able to collapse Babel Tower in time to retreat to the Chinese Federation Consulate forcing the Britannian army to retreat." Some wording issues: "Lelouch collapses the grounding and forces the Britannian military to fall into Chinese territory where they are politically restrained from attacking." Needs to be clarified for non-viewers as to what is happening. Some sentences are a bit awkward: "However, he takes a bullet meant for Rolo and plays on his insecurities about his future and sibling relationship, convincing him to join his cause." Overall, its these little prose issues that need the most work, but this is indeed a strong candidate. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 05:55, 24 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Added suggested comma's.
- Replaced grounding sentence with "Lelouch collapses the flooring, causing the Britannian military to fall into Chinese territory where they are politically restrained from attacking."
- Replaced insecurity sentence with "Lelouch arranges a charade to seemingly save Rolo's life; using this and their pseudo-brotherly relationship, he convinces Rolo to join the Black Knights." DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 23:10, 24 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments by Gabriel Yuji
| Resolved comments from DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 09:23, 21 February 2014 (UTC)[reply] |
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"Beginning episode 13, the opening theme is "World End" by Flow and "Waga Rōtashi Aku no Hana" (わが﨟たし悪の華?, lit. "My Beautifully Elegant Flower of Evil") by Ali Project." Is there something missing here? "Beginning episode 13, the opening theme is "World End" by Flow"; until here the sentence is ok. But then is stated "and "Waga Rōtashi Aku no Hana" (わが﨟たし悪の華?, lit. "My Beautifully Elegant Flower of Evil") by Ali Project." And what? Is "Waga Rōtashi Aku no Hana" also a opening theme or the second ending theme? Gabriel Yuji (talk) 21:43, 2 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"There, Lelouch witnesses her past, and returns to the Sword of Akasha to save C.C.; The two return to reality where Lelouch discovers C.C. has lost all her memories except those before receiving the power of Geass." After a semicolon you shouldn't capitalize. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 05:55, 6 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
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I support. It's excellent! Gabriel Yuji (talk) 20:03, 19 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments by Cirt
- Support (having stumbled here from my FLC discussion page). Very nicely done overall by DragonZero. A minor point: I'd suggest changing subsection header from "Other English releases" to "Additional English releases". DragonZero, I wonder if you'd be interested in improving List of Cowboy Bebop episodes to a similar level of quality? — Cirt (talk) 22:36, 3 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks. I'm going to keep other though, since additional seems as if it is an add on to the North American release. I don't think I will take it up Cowboy Bebop as of current. DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 09:47, 4 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
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