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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by User:Scorpion0422 22:52, 25 June 2008 [1].

List of Black Lagoon episodes edit

This is a list of episodes of the Black Lagoon anime. I believe it qualifies under the featured list criteria, as well as satisfying project-specific criteria such as WP:FICT. It is of similar or better status than similar anime episode lists such as List of Blue Drop: Tenshitachi no Gikyoku episodes and List of True Tears episodes. The episode summaries are not excessive in length, and other relevant information is covered. Sephiroth BCR (Converse) 02:21, 5 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments Support

Gary King (talk) 04:44, 6 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "which utilized "Peach Headz Addiction" " → "which used "Peach Headz Addiction" "
  • bold "list of episodes of the Black Lagoon" instead of what it has now, perhaps moving the "Black Lagoon" link to "the Black Lagoon manga"
  • Did we ever get a consensus on that? I was unsure, so I stuck with the normal episode list bold format. Sephiroth BCR (Converse) 21:50, 5 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I'll leave it up to you, since I have yet to do an episode list FLC – but it's coming soon! Gary King (talk) 21:58, 5 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'll leave it as is for now, but I'll defer to whatever consensus arises on the matter. Sephiroth BCR (Converse) 22:12, 5 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "episodes; one opening" → "episodes: one opening" (colon). The reason being the part after the semicolon is a sentence fragment.
  • "the ending and closing themes" → it would be useful if it mentioned what was the difference between an ending and closing theme? They both sound very similar.
  • I think it's pretty self-explanatory, and the link to theme music shows it. I can add more clarification if you want. Sephiroth BCR (Converse) 21:50, 5 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Now that I think about it, shouldn't it be "the opening and closing themes"? Or is it correct how it is now? Gary King (talk) 21:58, 5 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Replacing what? If it's the list of themes, then separating them is probably better for reader comprehension. Sephiroth BCR (Converse) 22:12, 5 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I mean, what is the difference between an 'ending' and a 'closing' theme music? They both happen at the end of an episode. Are you sure "containing all the ending and closing themes," shouldn't instead be "containing all the opening and closing themes,"? That seems to make more sense to me after reading the paragraph a few times. Gary King (talk) 23:23, 5 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Oh. That's what you're referring to. Yeah, it probably was a spur of the moment thing. Should be "opening and closing themes". Thanks. Sephiroth BCR (Converse) 23:26, 5 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Entertainment, with the" → Suggest removing comma for a period, and then having "Six DVD compilations, each containing two episodes of the first season, have been released by Geneon Entertainment. The first compilation was released on August 26, 2006,[4] and the sixth compilation was released on December 27, 2006."
  • "The episodes of the second season have been released in six DVD compilations; the first on January 31, 2007 and the sixth on June 27, 2007." → "The episodes of the second season have been released on six DVD compilations from January 31, 2007 to June 27, 2007." — I think that makes more sense. The part after the semicolon is also a fragment, and my wander forgets easily so when only the release date for the first and sixth is mentioned, I wonder why the ones in between are not. Actually, this would be similar to "The English adaptation of the anime is also distributed by Geneon Entertainment; three DVD compilations each containing four episodes were released between May 22, 2007 and September 18, 2007.", which is good.

Gary King (talk) 14:58, 5 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)
  • Caption is a fragment so remove the full stop.
  • Four paragraphs seems a little excessive but check WP:LEAD.
  • Might as well link first instance of DVD in lead.
  • "disk" is Brit Eng, the rest appears in Am Eng, can you clarify which Eng you're using.
  • "sympathesize" isn't an English word.
  • "in a hired mercenaries" - a mercenary or some mercenaries..
  • More copyediting required on all synopses.
  • "Amazon.co.jp: BLACK LAGOON The Second Barrage 006" - you go on to say it's Amazon.com and that it's Japanese - do you really need "Amazon.co.jp:"?
  • Same with the Amazon.com ref.

That's it for the moment. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:37, 15 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Matthew

Comments

  • Is "The episodes of the first season of the anime are directed by Sunao Katabuchi" in the correct tense? I know that TV episodes exist forever, so we would say "Black Lagoon is an anime series", but the direction only happened once, in the past.
Fixed. Sephiroth BCR (Converse) 22:25, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "for ransom purposes" → "to hold for ransom"?
  • "The group manages to escape to the Black Lagoon." how?
  • "The gunship forces the Black Lagoon to travel down a river, and they hit a dead end." The gunship does, or the Black Lagoon does? If the latter, how does a river just end?
  • The Black Lagoon does. And a river can't end? They reach a big rock formation that the river ends at. Is it called something differently in that case? Sephiroth BCR (Converse) 22:25, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Hmm.. I guess I was thinking they were travelling down-stream. I guess if they're going up-stream they hit the point where the river begins. Nevermind. Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 22:36, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Afterwards, the job is revealed" → "Subsequently", perhaps?
  • Expand SS to Schutzstaffel on first use.
  • Can a non-sales site be found for the DVDs?
  • Replaced a couple. The only alternative to the Amazon links for the Japanese DVDs is the official site itself, but it's in Flash, so I can't directly link to the DVD section. Sephiroth BCR (Converse) 22:25, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 22:05, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Think that's it. Sephiroth BCR (Converse) 22:25, 22 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Support Looks pretty good! Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 15:42, 25 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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