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The list was promoted by SchroCat (talk) 20:39, 1 March 2015 [1].

Kareena Kapoor Khan filmography edit

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Nominator(s): BOLLYWOOD DREAMZ (talk · contribs), FrB.TG (talk · contribs), Krimuk90 (talk · contribs)

We are nominating a well sourced filmography of Kareena Kapoor Khan. Comments on how to improve the list will be highly appreciated. I will be more than happy to resolve any of them. FrankBoy (Buzz) 07:53, 16 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Ssven2
  • Can you rephrase "Indian actress Kareena Kapoor, credited as Kareena Kapoor Khan after her marriage, has appeared in over 50 Bollywood films. " as "Kareena Kapoor, credited as Kareena Kapoor Khan after her marriage, is an Indian actress who has appeared in over 50 Bollywood films."
  • "The last of these emerged as the highest-grossing Bollywood film in overseas to that point," — "The last of these" and "to that point" can be rephrased as "The last of the three" and "at that time."
  • "and she was awarded a Special Performance Award at Filmfare" can be rephrased as "she won a Filmfare Award under the Special Performance category".
Tweaked it to "..earning her a Special Performance Award at Filmfare". I think that reads much better.
  • A quick question — Was she always under house arrest in Kurbaan?
  • again the phrase "to that point" after 3 Iditos can be rephrased as "at that time" (not that "to that point" is wrong but it sounds anonymous, maybe that's just me .)
  • Hi Ssven2! we have resolved your concerns except "to that point" one as I think it sounds more encyclopedic than "at that time". Much appreciated , FrankBoy (Buzz) 12:25, 16 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks Ssven. :) -- KRIMUK90 ✉ 12:42, 16 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Support — Ssven2 speak 2 me 16:10, 16 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Bede735

This filmography meets all of the requirements for a stand-alone list. The prose section is well-written, comprehensive, and effectively introduces the subject. The article structure and article style comply with MOS guidance. The tables are formatted nicely, uncrowded, and visually appealing. The tooltip on Refs is helpful. The lead image has an appropriate license reviewed by an administrator. It's nice to see you did not crowd the article with excessive images. Finally, the list appears stable from its recent history. I have a few suggestions:

  • In the first paragraph, following the lead sentence, you may want to add one additional sentence before moving directly into the history of her film appearances. Maybe something like, "She is known for playing a variety of characters in a range of film genres—from contemporary romantic comedies to crime dramas."
  • I think that this being a filmography page really does not need such, does it? It directly states her career history and not what she is known for. Since this filmography is written after other featured filmoraphies, I have not added any. They should be on one's biography. Don't you think?
  • The first sentence in the second paragraph is a little awkward. Perhaps rephrase it to, "Kapoor's portrayal of a prostitute in the 2004 drama Chameli proved to be a turning point in her career, earning her ..."
  • Done.
  • In the first table, correct the piped link to Aśoka. It should be Aśoka (film).
  • Done.
  • In the first table, per WP:OVERLINK, remove two duplicate links for director Abbas–Mustan, one each for Suneel Darshan, J. P. Dutta, and Satish Kaushik, three for Priyadarshan, and two for Rohit Shetty.
  • The directors are all wikilinked because the column is sortable.
  • In the Bibliography section, the Edgar citation is missing the year parameter. I know the year appears in the title, but the year in the citation refers to the publication year, and this title could have more than one edition.
  • I am not sure whether or not the date of publication is 2009 and that is not available.

I hope these comments help. Regards, Bede735 (talk) 15:20, 22 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, @Bede735:. They have been taken care of. --FrankBoy (Buzz) 20:33, 22 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Support – Bede735 (talk) 22:56, 22 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Tks fellas – Sven and Bede. --FrankBoy (Buzz) 23:07, 22 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Comments

Nice list, just a few items before a support.

  • "emerged as the highest-grossing Bollywood film in overseas to that point" - 'in overseas' sounds awkward without a noun after it. Maybe overseas sales
  • Done.
  • "However, she followed this with roles" - 'this' is ambiguous, replace with 'this early success' or something
  • I couldn't think of anything else. Used "this early success", thanks for that.
  • "However, her sole release of 2014," - nothing to play the however off of, reverse to "Her sole release of 2014, however,"
  • Done.
  • Ref. should be Ref(s)., since some cells have multiple
  • Done.
  • "Also playback singer for song" - playback singer?
  • Yes, playback – Bollywood uses a pre-recorded song in the song's music video and the actors lip-sync.
  • link BBC in the documentary table
  • I am not sure if I need to link this as we need to link the title (which is unknown) and not the producer or such.
  • Done.
  • First book in bibliography missing release date/year (2009, according to the copyright page)
  • "2009" is the part of the book's title and I am not sure if the year 2009 is the date of publication. There is no publication data in the website.
--PresN 19:32, 23 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • @PresN: Thanks for the review. I have resolved almost all of the above. --FrankBoy (Buzz) 20:08, 23 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm fine with the remainder, switching to support. --PresN 22:44, 23 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Tim riley

  • According to Microsoft's spell-check, "instalment" has only one "l" in both British and Indian English. No other quibbles about the prose.
  • I am not very sure about this. I, therefore, have replaced that with the world "film".
  • The list looks authoritative and complete. I note that more than half the citations are to the same site: "Bollywood Hungama". I have checked against a cognate FL filmography (Rani Mukerji's) and as I see that the same site was used for nearly half the citations there, I assume it is acceptable to rely so heavily on it here.
  • Perhaps the source Bollywood Hungama is the only one which contains each information about the film, I mean acting credits, info about crew etc.. And it's a leading entertainment website for Hindi cinema. In fact if you read some featured filmographies related to Bollywood, you'll find that more than half of the sources are published by BH.
  • I notice that the last three films listed have not been released yet. I know little about cinema and avoid it on the whole, but I have noticed the stern warning in the film section of the GAN page: "Please do not nominate articles on films that have not yet been released; as details within the article may change: they will be failed". On that basis, applying the same reasoning to FLC, ought the three unreleased films to be included here at the moment?
  • Upcoming film is not included unless filming for that film has begun. And filming for three have/had begun.

That's all from me. This article is clearly a labour of love and I wish it well, though I refrain (purely because of my ignorance of the topic) from formally supporting. – Tim riley talk 07:45, 24 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Tim riley: Thanks for the comments. --FrankBoy (Buzz) 09:37, 24 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]


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