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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by Dabomb87 21:55, 24 September 2010 [1].

1973 NBA Draft edit

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Nominator(s): —Chris!c/t 01:37, 28 August 2010 (UTC) & User:Martin tamb[reply]

We are nominating this for featured list because it's up to FL standard. It failed the first time due to the lack of comments.—Chris!c/t 01:37, 28 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • Wow. It has been here for 12 days. And still there is no comments.—Chris!c/t 19:50, 8 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 08:29, 13 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • I haven't mentioned this before, but wikilinking "draft" twice within a couple of sentences to different articles is a little odd.
Removed
  • I have no idea what an "underclassman" is.
Linked to Wikitionary
  • "comprising 211 players selected." maybe that's common USEng, but in my Queen's English, I'd prefer "comprising the selection of 211 players."
Fixed
  • "for 13 seasons and won 5 Italian league titles and 2 Euroleague titles." would prefer "for thirteen seasons and won five ... and two ..."
Spelled out except 13. Somewhere on WP:MOSNUM says number larger than 10 doesn't need to spelled out.
  • "which concluded with an induction to t" looked to me like he finished in 1995 and was inducted in 2001, so the "concluded" thing is a little strange for me.
Removed
  • What exactly is the information in parentheses?
The player trade info or the class level in college.—Chris!c/t 00:50, 10 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man (talk) 17:19, 9 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Courcelles 00:30, 20 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
*Comments
"After retiring as a player, he went on to coach the Chicago Bulls, the Detroit Pistons and the Washington Wizards." Citation?
"He has been selected to three ABA All-Star Games and two NBA All-Star Games." Present tense? Is there any chance he is ever selected to any more?
"He played there for 13 seasons and won five Italian league titles and two Euroleague titles. After retiring as a player, he coached Olimpia Milano and Benetton Treviso, leading the latter to 2 Italian league titles." MOSNUM problems here. All of these numbers have the same "quality"; when comparing like to like, you ignore the rule of 10 and make everything consistent into either words or numerals.
"the Major League Baseball (MLB)" "in the MLB." Read those aloud, the "the"'s there aren't needed.
Three pictures, three somewhat boring captions. Can you make them more interesting?
Publisher and location for refs 4, 39, and 41.

Courcelles 04:46, 13 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed. Still thinking about alternative captions, any suggestion? — Martin tamb (talk) 18:49, 17 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support I don't follow the NBA at all, so better captions are eluding me. Courcelles 00:30, 20 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from Giants2008 (27 and counting) 00:02, 24 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Comments –
  • No need for two List of NBA All-Stars links in consecutive sentences.
  • Euroleague is also overlinked in the lead.
  • Remove "the" in front of Major League Baseball (occurs twice by Winfield). Nobody refers to it that way. On the other hand, "and ABA" could use "the".
  • Note 1: "and Sonic's second-round pick as compensations." "Sonic's" → "the Sonics'" Giants2008 (27 and counting) 21:17, 15 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed. — Martin tamb (talk) 18:49, 17 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
The last one is still missing "the"; without it, the grammar is not optimal. Giants2008 (27 and counting) 22:03, 22 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Oops, I missed that, sorry. Fixed. — Martin tamb (talk) 02:44, 23 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comments Aside from the others noted:
    • "leading the latter to 2 Italian league titles" spell out two.

Wizardman Operation Big Bear 02:57, 16 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed. — Martin tamb (talk) 18:49, 17 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]


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