Wikipedia:Featured article review/Bishōjo game

Bishōjo game edit

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Review commentary edit

Messages left at User talk:Shibboleth, Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Computer and video games, Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Anime and manga, and Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Japan. Sandy 00:40, 12 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Does not meet current featured article quality standards, having no inline citations whatsoever. In addition, a large amount of original research is present, as well as strong violation of WP:NPOV on several occasions. While of minor note in comparison, the prose does not reach standards of "compelling, even brilliant." JimmyBlackwing 09:48, 9 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Needs inline citations (1. c.), and the "Related Terms" section needs an overhaul (1. a.). The bullet style format creates disjointed prose, so the paragraphs need to be all tied together in a cohesive style. LuciferMorgan 10:00, 9 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
The "Bishojo games in the West" section is too large for what the article admits is fairly unknown in Western countries. It reflects a slight bias of the creator of the articles. ColourBurst 03:32, 12 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Agree with all you've said. —Nightst a llion (?) 10:27, 14 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

FARC commentary edit

Suggested FA criteria concerns are citations (1c), original research, prose, and NPOV. Joelito (talk) 15:26, 24 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Remove. No effort has gone into the article's improvement, with all of the previously-cited problems remaining. JimmyBlackwing 08:48, 29 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Remove No inline citations (1. c. violation) and nobody has tackled the "Related Terms" section (1. a. violation). LuciferMorgan 13:33, 8 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]