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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by Ian Rose 04:57, 16 July 2014 [1].

The Whistleblower edit

Nominator(s): 1ST7 (talk) 21:08, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

The Whistleblower is a 2010 thriller film about human trafficking in postwar Bosnia-Herzegovina. It is based on the account of Nebraska police officer Kathryn Bolkovac, who worked as a peacekeeper in the region during the late 1990s and discovered a sex trafficking ring being facilitated by international peacekeeping personnel. The article was promoted to GA status in October 2013 and underwent a copyedit by the Guild of Copy Editors in December. I believe it meets the requirements for FA status and nominated it a few months ago, but the nomination stalled after receiving two support votes. I'm hoping that it will receive more reviews this time around and would greatly appreciate any comments. 1ST7 (talk) 21:08, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comment: I supported this article's promotion the last time around, but I've come to see some details that need to be fixed so I won't support just yet.
  • The opening line should read something like: The Whistleblower is a 2010 Canadian-German thriller film..."
  • The film's budget should get a mention somewhere.
  • How did the media in the Balkans respond to the film? This should be mentioned in the "Reviews" section.

Other than that, it still looks good to me. Cheers, 23 editor (talk) 16:02, 26 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your comments and suggestions. I've altered the opening line and added some information about the film's reception in the Balkans. However, I haven't been able to find the exact film budget anywhere, just several articles saying that it was low. According to this link, the budget is unknown, and I remember having read one article that mentioned it never being disclosed. --1ST7 (talk) 18:56, 26 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good. I think I'll support now. 23 editor (talk) 19:22, 26 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]


Comments from Corvoe edit

Hello there, 1ST7! Happy to start reviewing this, I'll get through as much as I can now and wrap it up later tonight or tomorrow. I'll go section by section with a fine tooth comb. I'll also make a handful of copy-editing changes.

Lead
  • I actually have to start off by refuting one of 23 editor's comments. According to WP:FILMLEAD, "If the nationality is not singular, cover the different national interests later in the lead section." I've gone ahead and made this change. Sorry 23 editor, I don't mean to offend if I have.
  • Not a fan of the parentheses in the lead. I feel like "attempting to shut down" would be sufficient, and less visually distracting.
  • Specific dates for the TIFF premiere and theatrical release would be nice. Also, mentioning the US release in the lead is pretty irrelevant, since the US had nothing to do with the production of this film (see WP:FILMRELEASE)
  • "The Whistleblower received several awards and nominations, including the 2012 Genie Awards." Did it receive several nominations at the Genie Awards, or was it nominated for the Genie Award?
Plot
  • "(entitled "Do not read this if you have a weak stomach or a guilty conscience")" is definitely weird, and seems unnecessary.
  • Link BBC. A lot of non-British people don't know it. Also, which branch? I'm assuming BBC News, so I'd specify that.
Production
  • "which served (and was protected by) other peacekeepers." I can't think of another way to word this, but it feels weird.
  • Photo of Madeleine Rees shouldn't be so wide. I'd crop it down slightly, so it's upright.
  • "she resolved to adapt the story for the screen; however, "I love documentaries, but I wouldn't even know how to make one." This feels awkward and kind of unrelated. I could be wrong.
  • "The Whistleblower is a Canadian–German co-production (Kondracki is Canadian)". Why does it matter that she's Canadian? Her nationality has nothing to do with the countries of production (see The Grand Budapest Hotel).
  • Filming section's quotes are formatted really strangely, they don't look like they're quotes (not the one from Bolkovac, the two in-text quotes).
Themes
  • Photos at the beginning of a section shouldn't be on the left, it makes the reader have to search for the starting text.
Reception
  • I've gone ahead and made some changes that I personally think adds to it. Feel free to revert these changes. Corvoe (speak to me) 22:50, 26 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Removed "R rating" note, as it's rating was never a point of relevance.

All in all, when these are all acknowledged, I'd be more than happy to support this.

Thank you for your comments and suggestions. I believe I have addressed all but two things: first, I have not altered the photo of Madeleine Rees because I don't know how to crop images; second, I am uncertain about changing the quote boxes, as another reviewer (from the last FA nomination) told me that they should be formatted that way due to the length of the quotes. --1ST7 (talk) 00:08, 27 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
The quote boxes were fine, I was referring to the in-text ones. I feel like there's a better way, but I can't think of one so I won't penalize you. Also, I cropped the image and added it in. Lastly, you have my... Corvoe (speak to me) 04:54, 27 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Support. This article is extremely well-written, well-sourced, and all-inclusive. It contains a large amount of information about the topic, all presented with quality illustrations and excellent prose. This is one of the best film articles I've encountered, no doubt. Congratulations to 1ST7 for this outstanding work. Corvoe (speak to me) 04:54, 27 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Images are appropriately captioned and licensed. Nikkimaria (talk) 14:02, 28 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Note -- Nikki, could you do a source review as well when you have time? Tks/cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 15:16, 12 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - spotchecks not done

  • Some of the details in the infobox, such as McGuigan's role, do not appear to be sourced
  • Double-check italicization - for example, NPR should not typically be italicized. Nikkimaria (talk) 16:26, 12 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Okay, I think those issues have been fixed. Thanks for the source review! --1ST7 (talk) 12:53, 14 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
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