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The article was not promoted 18:14, 29 April 2008.

The Muppets' Wizard of Oz

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previous FAC (15:47, 5 April 2008)


Self-nominator: This article has been nominated before, but has failed. There were many reasons why this article has failed, and after a fair amount of work and some time, the article has settled down and is well written. I must say, the article is fairly long for a telefilm, (TV-movie), so please keep this in mind when reviewing. If any problems surface, please leave me a note on my talk page. Have a nice day, Limetolime talk to me • look what I did! 22:28, 18 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • You don't need the current ref 4 "The Muppets: Wizard of Oz at Ebay"... since the only thing it is referencing is already referenced to a better source.

-REMOVED

-This review states facts that now are obvious, such as Dorothy being african-american and that it's similar to The Wiz. The distribution facts are also the same.

  • Current ref 14 "Ashanti answers critics and doubters" is a magazine article and should be formatted as such, giving author and publication date.

-DONE

-FIXED - I will directly cite the soundtrack, as it shown on the insert.

  • http://www.parentpreviews.com/movie-reviews/muppets-wizard-of-oz.shtml is a reliable source for it's review, but I'm not so sure it's a good souce for "The film's poster was first shown at the the Tribeca Film Festival, and all of the home video releases of the film to date have used this image. The film first premiered on television on May 20, 2005 on ABC in the US, and on CBC TV in Canada. The film was rated TV-PG for all US television airings." which is what is currently referenced to it.

-FIXED, I have removed these sources and added direct ones from Disney itself.

-PLEASE READ - Well, i think that it's OK for merchandise info, since it gives pictures of the merchandise, not just text. As for the Macy's flower show promotion, I also believe that it's OK. (Same reason, it gives pictures and not just words.)

All links checked out fine. Ealdgyth - Talk 02:12, 19 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
struck the resolved issuses, left the others up for others to decide for themselves Ealdgyth - Talk 14:24, 20 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments Please check the article for mistakes e.g.:

  • Dororthy learns that she is in Munchkinland..

-FIXED

  • The group assume that completing this task ..

-FIXED

  • Another such change was having Dorothy and her family be African-American,

-FIXED

  • The album was compilated by Ted Kryczko.

-FIXED

  • He travels with Dorothy and he friends to ask for courage from the Wizard of Oz.

-FIXED

  • The film's poster was first shown at the the Tribeca Film Festival

-REMOVED

  • In the US, the DVD and VHS release of the film was in a fullscreen 1.33:1 aspect ration

-FIXED

It's an improvement on the last version presented, but please ask someone new to the article to read it. GrahamColmTalk 12:51, 19 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Issues resolved, ЭLСОВВОLД talk 14:19, 21 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Oppose: criterion three problems have not been resolved since previous FAC and have, in fact, been exacerbated by additional unsupported fair use images:
    • Image:Emanddorothy.jpg replaceability says "Unless an image of the two appeared and is not used in the film, the image can be replaced". As both actresses are still alive, a free image of them together could be obtained. WP:NFCC#1 percludes fair use when this is the case.
      • REMOVED
    • Image:Tv the muppet show bein green gone.png: NFCC#3A requires minimal use. Kermit is clearly visible in the poster; a separate fair use image is not necessary. Additionally, although moot, image does not have a rationale for this article (NFCC#10C and WP:RAT).
      • REMOVED
    • Image:Ozcd.jpg: NFCC#3A requires minimal use. Image is materially identical to the infobox poster. Additionally, although moot, rationale is not complete (NFCC#10C and WP:RAT) and image is not low resolution (NFCC#3B).
      • REMOVED
    • Image:MuppetOzlogo.jpg: stated purpose of "to publicise the film" is not adequate or appropriate. NFCC#3A requires minimal use; similar logo is present on the infobox poster. What significant understanding (NFCC#8) does the original logo provide? Why was the logo change? Why is that important for us to know? ЭLСОВВОLД talk 14:07, 20 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      • REMOVED
  • Oppose. This is very well put together and I hope I can support it, but there are a few things that just aren't adding up.
    • There is an additional reference at "Marr, Merissa. Wall Street Journal - Eastern Edition; 5/19/2005, Vol. 245 Issue 98, pB1-B2" but I don't have access to the article. If anyone reads this with access please let us know.

    • -ACCESSIBLE - Just needs to be gone to manually. Limetolime talk to me • look what I did! 01:19, 24 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

    • Removed what?
      • "With a budget of $18,000,000,[2]" - This figure is not in that footnote 2.

    -REMOVED

    Did that $18m figure come from another source? maclean 01:04, 24 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    Yes, but the source was deemed unreliable. Limetolime talk to me • look what I did! 01:19, 24 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      • "During this time, ABC made several changes to the film that differ from the original novel. ... Another such change was Dorothy and her family's move from being caucasian to African-American, similar to The Wiz.[12]" - this implies that it was a conscious choice by ABC to cast someone who was specifically an African-American, rather than Ashanti who just happens to also be an African-American. The footnote makes the connection to The Wiz but does not back up the casting choice due to this other factor.

    -REMOVED

      • "Jason Segel and Nick Stoller originally signed on to direct and write the film, but the positions went to Kirk Thatcher and Tom Martin.[15]" - the ref says that Segel & Stoller will write/direct the next Muppets movie (in 2008/09), not this one (2004).

    -MOVED - To "future" section.

    I don't think the "Future" section is necessay. This bit about Segel & Stoller seems peripheral to the subject of this article. maclean 01:04, 24 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    Will remove.
      • "...Kermit the Frog had to have his face redone to give the character a more cloth-like feel.[8]" - this ref only mentions Kermit's "skin-care regimen" in what appears to be jest.

    -REMOVED

      • "During pre-production, Ashanti went under many interviews" - the reference interview seems to have been done as the movie was released and I didn't see any mention of pre-production activity in the ref.

    -FIXED

      • In footnote 17 "(2005) Album notes for The Best of the Muppets featuring The Muppets' Wizard of Oz [Insert]. Walt Disney Records." - If this is a reference to the album itself, I don't think the external link to the store is useful. I didn't see any of the footnoted info there.

    -FIXED

      • "...soundtrack was released on 17 May 2005[18]" - the ref says: "Audio CD (May 17, 2005): Original Release Date: May 20, 2005" what is the difference between the two dates?

    -FIXED

    Oh, I think the TV premiere was May 20 and the soundtrack release was May 17. This isn't a problem with the article, just my interpretation of the source. maclean 01:04, 24 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      • "placing at #3 for that night.[36]" - this footnote does not mention the #3 placing.--maclean 06:32, 23 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

    -FIXED

    Did that #3 figure come from another source? 01:04, 24 April 2008 (UTC)maclean
    • Comment, many of the references are missing the author fields. The word "stated" is used a lot (nine times by my count - mostly in the Reception section). It would be beneficial to be less repetitive. I'm not sure about the tense of the Reception section. I think that the reviews and the film should be described in the present tense but I checked on a few other FAs and they seem to differ (sometimes differ within the same article) - so I left them as is, in the past tense. --maclean 04:58, 24 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

    -FIXED - I reworded most of the reception. Limetolime talk to me • look what I did! 19:51, 24 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

    • Comment. Several points are brought up in the intro but are not addressed in the body. According to WP:LEAD the intro should just be summarizing the article, and not contain unsupported material. Specifically, the following items are not brought up
    "special Friday night edition of ABC's The Wonderful World of Disney"

    -REMOVED

    "Thatcher, a Henson veteran who helmed the Muppets' last television special, It's a Very Merry Muppet Christmas Movie, which aired on NBC on 21 November 2002"

    -REMOVED

    "in association with Fox Television Studios,[7] Touchstone Television[7] and the Muppets Holding Company."

    -ADDED TO PRODUCTION SECTION - I have kept this statement but have also included it in the production section. --maclean 05:52, 24 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

    • Support. My concerns have been addressed. There are still a few cite templates being completed but I approve of the article. --maclean 07:05, 25 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

    Notes on The Muppets' Wizard of Oz:

    "Lead Paragraphs"

    • "Starring Ashanti and The Muppets, the film was based on L. Frank Baum's novel The Wonderful Wizard of Oz, and it was written by The Simpsons writer Tom Martin." Consider two short sentences, punctuate Simpsons' writer.

    -DONE

    • The rest of the paragraph in the lead paragraph reads like a plot summary. Perhaps leave it as a plot statement.

    -DONE

    • The second and third paragraphs also appear to cover production and release information best handled in sections devoted to those topics.

    -WILL KEEP, as the intro should cover what the article is about.

    "Plot"

    • Overlinking is noted, e.g. "uncle" and "aunt" are not essential wikilinks.

    -REMOVED

    • Minor wordsmithing required, "as the film ends, Dorothy..." Check use of phrase placement.
    • Plot seems overly detailed and long, perhaps consider a tighter summary and less of a "scene-by-scene" synopsis.

    "Production"

    • First sentence/first paragraph is ripe for splitting.

    -SPLIT

    • Ashanti wikilink in the second paragraph and later paragraph, goes to wrong link not the singer.

    -FIXED

    • Ashanti quote? Is it necessary?

    -KIND OF, adds depth to the production section.

    • Revise "but the part was given to Ashanti" – to a more active voice, "Ashanti won the part."

    -FIXED

    • Revise "Ashanti went under many interviews for the film" to "Ashanti gave numerous interviews for the film " (many is an imprecise word, numerous is not much better).

    -FIXED

    • Ashanti quote not much elucidation, sounds hokey.

    -FIXED

    "Music"

    • Consider changing all declarative sentences to an active voice, e.g. "The original songs from the film were written by Michael Giacchino" to "Michael Giacchino wrote the original songs for the film", and so on.

    -FIXED

    "Cast and characters"

    • Title usually written as "Cast."

    -FIXED

    • Most of the character information a repeat of the plot information. Consider drastic cut-back.

    -DOING

    "Distribution"

    • Waaay too much information on secondary issues such as rating systems.

    -WILL KEEP, just to include more info on the subject.

    • Revise "they sold plush dolls" – who is the "they?"

    -FIXED

    "Reception"

    • Revise "attracted 7.6 million viewers" as an imprecise way of "7.6 million viewers saw..."

    -FIXED

    • Authoritative critical reviews are needed, some of the user reviews of sites such as Mutant Reviews are very suspect, (not well written, not well researched, etc.)

    -FIXING

    "References"

    • Consider significant textual sources as part of a bibliography and consilidate cites from the same source.

    -FIXING

    FWiW, just a cursory look, Bzuk (talk) 01:18, 28 April 2008 (UTC).[reply]

    All the fixes were done be me: Limetolime talk to me • look what I did! 01:37, 28 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

    Oppose. I think the prose needs a thorough copyedit. I've left examples of some of the issues below, but the entire article needs work.

    • Many of the sentence beginnings are repetitive. Lots of sentences that begin with "Dorothy" or "The film".
    • Watch for unnecessary repetition. For example: "he grants the group all of their wishes. Dorothy's wish is finally granted by the wizard"

    -FIXING

    • Any information about why the release date changed a day?

    -ADDED - It's funny, I had this a while ago. But, it was removed because its source was deemed unreliable.

    • Some clauses don't seem to match well. For example, "Michael Giacchino wrote the original songs for the film, an Academy Award-nominated composer known for his work on a previous Muppet production: Little Muppet Monsters." - the clause about "Academy Award-nominated composer described Michael Giacchino, not "original songs for the film". This type of sentence needs to be reworded (and there are numerous examples of this throughout the article)

    -FIXED - You know, I had to change this to satisfy Bzuk, but I guess it turned out to be wrong. (No offense)

    • Lots of colloquial language which is really not appropriate for an encyclopedia article, Examples: "Those five songs turned out to be", "hits the air"

    -WILL CHANGE

    • I don't really understand what this is trying to say "Before any statements were released, ABC teamed with Fox Television Studios, Touchstone Television and the Muppets Holding Company to produce The Muppets' Wizard of Oz."

    -FIXED

    • Some of the paragraphs do not flow well. For example, the paragraph that begins "Filming took place throughout September 2004" has the following organization, which makes little sense
      • Filming took place on this diate

    -REPLACED

      • BEFORE filming, ABC said this

    -REMOVED

      • "During this time" -- what time? Filming or pre-filming?

    -FIXED

      • People auditioned (again, before filming, but is this before or after the announcement that the film was based on the book?)

    -FIXED - I have also rearranged the section for better flow. Limetolime talk to me • look what I did! 23:35, 28 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

    The flow is not any better than before. Karanacs (talk) 15:47, 29 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    How? The production section is fine. I have combined a few short sentences for better flow; I don't know how it can't be better.
      • Ashanti got the part

    -FIXED

      • Quentin Tarantinto in the movie

    -FIXED

      • Ashanti talks about filming

    -FIXED

    • Other paragraphs seem like a collection of individual facts; they need to be reworked into a more cohesive paragraph.
    • At one point the article says the soundtrack was released four days before the television premiere (May 20 - 4 = May 16); at another point it says the soundtrack was released May 17.

    -FIXED - sorry.

    • When a sentence begins with a number, the number should be spelled out

    -NOT FIXING - All years, dates, and percentages should be written with numbers.

    • "At the film's Rotten Tomatoes listing, out of seven reviews, 29% were positive.[" - why not just say that of 7 reviews, only 2 were positive rather than use a percentage for a small number?

    -CAN'T FIX - All other FA film articles are written like this.

    • A lot of the reviews listed are from places I've never heard of. Are these really reliable sources to use?

    -YES, it's only for reviewing, not production statements. For more info, check the previous FAC.

    • I wouldn't consider toughpigs.com to be a reliable source.

    -It's only pictures. Karanacs (talk) 14:09, 28 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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