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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by User:SandyGeorgia 19:47, 30 June 2008 [1].

Terry Sanford edit

Self-nominator: — Rlevse • Talk •


I found this article, liked it and spend a lot of time improving it with the help of others--making me a major contributor and self-nom. Sanford was a educator and politician from North Carolina. ... — Rlevse • Talk • 21:38, 20 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Links checked out with the link checker tool, other sources look okay. Ealdgyth - Talk 22:15, 20 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Change politicalgraveyard to one that you didn't object to that covers same things. Changed Emporis to official GSA ref. Working on other two. — Rlevse • Talk • 22:46, 20 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
All four may be reliable, you know. (Although I have serious doubts about political graveyard ...) Ealdgyth - Talk 22:49, 20 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
The numbers in our campaigns match other sources but it displays it with percents and in chart form, so I think that's okay. 4president reproduces his campaign brochure in word form, it's not found elsewhere, so I think that's okay two. Can we keep those two? — Rlevse • Talk • 22:52, 20 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I'll leave the 4president one out for others to decide for themselves (I have a small quibble about copyright issues with it also, want one of the copyright gurus to say it's clear to link to it...) The other, maybe use it as an external link/secondary source and link to the numbers in books also? The main concern with ourcampaigns is that they don't seem to cite where they get their numbers (although if I missed it, please point out my blindness to me, it's been a long hot day in the sun here, so I'm perfectly capable of missing things...) Ealdgyth - Talk 22:55, 20 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I used one of the books for the 4presidnet ref and moved it to external links. The same numbers in ourcampaigns ref are all over the web and so far it looks like it's the best ref--it's even used as a ref by other sites. — Rlevse • Talk • 00:28, 21 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Hm, used by any major news companies? If so, that'd help prove its reliability, I'd think. Ealdgyth - Talk 00:36, 21 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Done with all. Found one from TIME that uses a part of the data, added as a second ref. — Rlevse • Talk • 01:14, 21 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • The wikilinks to stuff like 1940s isn't really necessary
  • "Driven by his belief that a person could accomplish anything with a good education" - source?
  • Time Magazine needs italics in all references
  • "Sanford was Kennedy's choice for vice president on the 1964 Democratic ticket, had Kennedy lived" - this reads awkwardly, perhaps try "Sanford would have been Kennedy's choice... had he lived"?

(Covers up to the Senate career section...) giggy (:O) 03:05, 21 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Done. — Rlevse • Talk • 10:51, 21 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support. Did a read through the rest and nothing of issue came up. —Giggy 06:52, 30 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Done. — Rlevse • Talk • 10:33, 21 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support Comments. Overall, the article looks well-written. Have you checked out the book that is listed in the Further Reading that is specifically about him to see if it would have any relevant information that isn't already in the article? Other comments:
    • I don't like this sentence During World War II he enlisted as a private in the US Army, parachuted into France in combat with the 517th Parachute Infantry Regiment, was awarded the Bronze Star and Purple Heart, fought in the Battle of the Bulge, attained the rank of First Lieutenant, and was discharged in 1946. I think it is trying to cram too many events into one sentence which minimizes their impact a bit. Just separating it into two or three sentences would likely be fine.
    • I would include his party affilitation when first discussing his state offices; that way people who don't read the lead will still know.
    • This is a very weird citation format ,[7]:157, 194, 247, 257–258 [10] - is that intentional?
    • University of North Carolina is wikilinked the third time it is referred to; may be better to do so at the first reference
    • It might be wise to include a very brief description of what the Governor's School of North Carolina is - I've never heard of anything like that and it is interesting

Karanacs (talk) 02:06, 27 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Done. As for the footnotes with numbers, that is intentional. See {{rp}} as to why. Thanks for improvement tips. I have not found a copy of the book in further reading. — Rlevse • Talk • 02:28, 27 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I've never seen that citation format; thanks for educating me. Karanacs (talk) 03:17, 27 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support I thoroughly enjoyed reading this article. There were some 1a issues, but after copyediting the article myself, these concerns have been addressed. Nishkid64 (Make articles, not wikidrama) 19:22, 29 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    • Glad you enjoyed it. — Rlevse • Talk • 19:25, 29 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      • Oh, and please address all my inline comments. There's about 5-10 still left in the article. Nishkid64 (Make articles, not wikidrama) 19:28, 29 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
          • Just started looking at that. Should be done soon. FYI, I only see two left. — Rlevse • Talk • 19:30, 29 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
              • I answered the inlines and also made a "Books by Terry Sanford" section. — Rlevse • Talk • 20:16, 29 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Answered Sandy's postwar concern too. — Rlevse • Talk • 20:21, 29 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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