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Tales of Graces edit
- The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.
The article was not promoted by User:Laser brain 09:53, 30 July 2013 [1].
- Nominator(s): DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 22:09, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
This article includes every information in existence, I think. I want to see how it'll fare in FAC before my summer ends. DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 22:09, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Withdrawn. DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 20:11, 25 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Support - on the disclaimer that I was the GA reviewer for this article and had any concerns I had addressed after the review. My full GA review can be found here. Red Phoenix build the future...remember the past... 22:12, 20 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Oppose
- Prose needs extensive copy-editing. I'm seeing shifts in tenses ("found an amnesiac girl and witnesses her death"), redundancy ("received positive reception"), and awkward phrasing ("citing the gameplay to be") in the lead alone
- Plot section is very confusing to someone unfamiliar with the game. For example, how is Sophie alive seven years later? Did she die first or not?
- It wasn't explained until late in the game and I used her character's page for it since I couldn't get it to flow with the story.
- Further attention to the Manual of Style is needed. Game titles should always be italicized, don't link the same terms twice in a single section, etc
- Yeah, I was wondering whether each of those characters counted as a section or not. I forgot to italicize the game titles there.
- Lots of primary sources - in addition to the primary-sources section, you've also got things like Silverstein's resume and Facebook posts
- Primary sources were mostly for plot related things. I thought the resume site would be preferable over Behind the Voice Actors but guess not. I thought the facebook post might pass since it's a post by the company and that the company's website hasn't updated itself to include the game.
- Some citations don't support the material they're meant to. For example, you cite "The text was translated by 8-4" to this site, which makes clear that their list includes titles where "[their involvement was] super minor (i.e. “translated one character’s 17 battle lines and took the game director out to dinner”)" without differentiation from titles where they were more extensively involved - with that source alone, you can only say 8-4 was involved, not that the text was translated by them.
At this point, I would probably suggest withdrawal so you can revamp the sourcing and then send the article through the Guild. Nikkimaria (talk) 13:47, 25 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Yeah I'll withdrawal. DragonZero (Talk · Contribs) 20:09, 25 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Closing note: This candidate has been withdrawn, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. --Laser brain (talk) 13:51, 30 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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