Wikipedia

Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Take Ichi convoy/archive1

< Wikipedia:Featured article candidates
The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by SandyGeorgia 23:51, 26 April 2009 [1].

Take Ichi convoy edit

Nominator(s): Nick-D (talk) 02:09, 19 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Toolbox

This article covers a Japanese convoy operation of World War II whose failure had significant results for the New Guinea campaign. It has been peer reviewed and recently passed a Military History WikiProject A-class review, and I think that it may now meet the featured article criteria. Nick-D (talk) 02:09, 19 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

  • Tech. Review

images all fine Fasach Nua (talk) 08:42, 19 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comments - sources look okay, links checked out with the link checker tool. Ealdgyth - Talk 13:43, 21 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support A shorter article, but very well done, sourced and informative, and makes tactful use of pictures. --Pstanton (talk) 00:55, 22 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support - an excellent and well composed article that satisfies the criteria. I do have two minor points, though, but my support is not dependent on them:
    • In the lead, the phrase "killing thousands of soldiers" comes off as a little dramatic to me. May I suggest this be substituted for something such as "killing several thousand soldiers" or "killing over 4,000 soldiers".
      • Done. Thanks also for your tweaks to the article.
        • You are very welcome, but there was very little to tweak! Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 04:55, 25 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
    • I think it would be best if the photograph of Rear Admiral Kajioka be moved down to the next paragraph as there is a slight sandwich of text between the photograph and New Guinea campaign box.
      • What monitor size/screen resolution are you using? The photo is too far down in that section for my 24" monitor (it causes a bit of a gap between the end of the section and the start of the 'voyage' section) but it looks fine on my smaller monitor at work. Nick-D (talk) 22:54, 24 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
        • I think it's a 17" monitor and the resolution is 1024 x 768. It isn't a massive sandwich or anything, so if it's fine on the other monitors than don't worry about it. Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 04:55, 25 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 13:15, 24 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

  • Support I wish I had something to contribute, but alas I don't. Well done. Mm40 (talk) 14:11, 24 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support Don't know much about the subject material, and so can't speak about the coverage, but the prose and MOS compliance looks good to me. Two very minor points: Sasata (talk) 17:50, 25 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
    • "...and the units selected for western New Guinea remained in China until shipping became available in April 1944." underlined part sounds slightly odd to me, how about switching "available" to "possible" or "feasible"?
    • one-and-a-half -> are the hyphens necessary/grammatically correct?
      • Thanks for your comments. I've just tweaked the article to make it clearer that the two divisions were stuck in China until ships became available to transport them (they appear to have been able to have embarked much earlier had there been ships to carry them) and have removed the hyphens. Cheers, Nick-D (talk) 23:41, 25 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]
The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. No further edits should be made to this page.
Retrieved from "https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Wikipedia:Featured_article_candidates/Take_Ichi_convoy/archive1&oldid=1089083379"