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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 10:19, 4 March 2016 [1].

Sonam Kapoor edit

Nominator(s): Frankie talk 20:44, 10 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Sonam Kapoor is an Indian actress, working in Bollywood films. She, not as successful as her contemporaries, is known more for her dresses than her roles and films, which are not quite entertaining and most of them have failed commercially. In the meanwhile, she has starred in some of the films -- such as Raanjhnaa and the recent Prem Ratan Dhan Payo -- which might be remembered for a short period of time.

I nominated the article some months ago but failed due to some reservations about prose and neutrality. It was recently copy-edited by WP:GOCE and peer reviewed. Please note that an image review was done in its peer review. I would like to see comments on how I can further improve the article. Thank you. -- Frankie talk 20:44, 10 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • Support – All my concerns were addressed during its previous nomination and the peer review. Hopefully it'll pass this time. Yashthepunisher (talk) 05:57, 11 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support: The article meets all the criteria. Plus, now with re-addition of important information, the article seems brilliant. Well done Frankie.Krish | Talk 20:08, 14 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks a lot for the comments, support and re-addition of the personal life "stuff" but please note that I didn't remove but merged them to the "Life and career" section. And as for the media image section, I liked the changes you made. I just removed some quotes and did some trimming so that reviewers don't complain about its neutrality. Thanks for your time, Krish! -- Frankie talk 21:48, 14 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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Source review from Johanna

I had done a source review on the previous FAC and found the article to check out, as it was based on high-quality, reliable sources. I had a few questions regarding the nature of a few of the sources, and they were summarily answered. With that, I reiterate my Support. Johanna(talk to me!) 00:16, 21 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Actually, I do have one question—in the prior FAC, you said that Mid Day was "a reputable source"--could you expand on this? Johanna(talk to me!) 15:28, 21 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Well, it has been used on almost every FA concerning Bollywood. It has received several awards, such as INMA Global Media Awards and INMA Awards so I believe it's a decent source to use. -- Frankie talk 15:35, 21 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Mid Day is indeed a RS, as it's operated by Jagran publication's. The same company behind Dainik Jagran, one of the most read indian newspaper. Yashthepunisher (talk) 16:56, 21 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

(Off-topic discussion moved to Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/Sonam Kapoor/archive2) --Laser brain (talk) 17:54, 22 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • Support Just read through the article for a second time, and I think it's pretty much flawless. I remember reviewing the GAN and found no issues with the sources, and I've also looked through the source review in the previous FAC and everything has been addressed. There is one thing I did notice; "Kapoor was born in the Mumbai suburb of Chembur on 9 June 1985.[1][3]" - although the first reference contains the information on her date of birth and Chembur, the second reference doesn't. This is minor, but I'd recommend moving that citation anywhere else. Other than that, this article definitely meets the criteria. JAGUAR  21:17, 30 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Removed that source. Thanks for your GA review, PR comments and support, much appreciated. -- Frankie talk 21:28, 30 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Support—After going through the article once again, i found that the nominator has resolved mny queries and i also find his explanation to a couple of comments quite reasonable. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 08:36, 31 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Weak support Had to give a significant copyedit myself but the prose is certainly improved overall. The article is now in my opinion approaching FA quality so I'm leaning towards support. The lede though I think is still rather weak and needs to be strengthened and a bit more informative about the nature of the roles, perhaps with less films mentioned. Could still benefit from a few decent editors overlooking it and really polishing it off, and I would like to see somebody like Nikkimaria do a vigorous spotcheck for sources and citations. In places I think the citations look a bit cluttered and in places you might give more sources than you actually need to. Other than this, I believe it covers the necessary aspects of her career to date and is on the right track to pass now. Good luck.♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:36, 7 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks x2. -- FrB.TG (talk) 13:13, 7 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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Support from an IP with a few comments:

  • I don't think that you need to source her date of birth in infobox because it's already sourced in the life section.
  • Use pronoun instead of repeating her last name in every sentence in the Aisha part.
  • "which was also poorly received with mixed reviews". Two different statements.
  • "Bhaag Milkha Bhaag was one of 2013's top-grossing films". It was a top grossing film in the Hindi film industry not worldwide.
Not sure how an IP from the UK got interested in a Bollywood actress but thanks for the comments. -- Frankie talk 15:27, 25 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Spot checks from Famous Hobo

Alright, I just went through every ref (I don't recommend doing, it takes a toll on you). Anyway, for the most part, everything matches up fine, just a few things that need to be addressed

  • What is the point of Ref 5? It doesn't say anything Sunita
  • When the statement about how Kapoor's dresses have drawn criticism, only Ref 113 actually mentions criticism. Refs 109 and 112 simply show pictures of what she wears.
The other two refs are for the praise for her dress sense and style.
  • Ref 129 doesn't say anything about Mijwan Welfare Society empowering girls, but that it "collect[s] money for the very skilled villagers of Mijwan, who do exquisite work on clothes"
  • Ref 133 says Kapoor was nominated for a Zee Cine Award, but never states what award. You could say this is implied since the previous two award mentions say she was nominated for BBest Female Debut, but if possible, I'd recommend finding a better source
Yeah, but the source was also published in 2009 and by then she had received only one nomination from said award. Unfortunately I could not find an alternative. I can remove it if you want.
  • Ref 145 isn't available in my region so ... I can't check
I can't thank you enough for this exhausting job (yes I know how tiring spot-checking can be). Hopefully the comments are addressed and my replies are justifiable. -- Frankie talk 08:44, 1 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
For the Zee Cine Award, are you sure that's the only mention of it? If it is, then I'd say it's fine to leave it, since it's implied from the previous statements, though it's your choice. Anyway, like I said, everything else checks out, so to repay the favor from my FAC, I'll Support this article with it's sources. Nice article by the way. Famous Hobo (talk) 16:50, 1 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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