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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by Hog Farm via FACBot (talk) 27 June 2022 [1].

Shaylee Mansfield edit

Nominator(s): Pamzeis (talk) 10:30, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Shaylee Mansfield... she hasn't been around for very long and is probably younger than most of us. So Mansfield began appearing in viral ASL videos as a child and received some media coverage. In 2016, she starred in a viral Disney Parks ad. She became an actress after appearing in films like Noelle with Anna Kendrick and Feel the Beat with Sofia Carson. She has also made a request to Instagram that garnered coverage from Slate, MIT Technology Review and CNET. And finally, this year, she became the first deaf actor to be credited alongside the voice actors in an animated production... at 12 years old! This article passed a GA review earlier this year by Mujinga and was peer reviewed by Aoba47. All (constructive) comments welcome! Pamzeis (talk) 10:30, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comments edit

  • "As of 2016, Shaylee attends a deaf school" - 2016 was six years ago, so this should be in the past tense
    • Done
  • "Because of the earlier relationship between Mansfiled" - spelt wrong
    • 💀
  • "the first-such credit" - that hyphen should not be there
    • Removed
  • That's all I got! -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 12:07, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 13:16, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
    Thank you so much! Pamzeis (talk) 16:11, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comments edit

  • "ASL" is not repeated again in the lead. Do we need to define the acronym?
    • Removed
  • "Mansfield has a younger sister named Ivy, who is hearing" — I feel the wording is a bit odd, though I am not sure.
    • Assuming you're talking about the bit after the comma, it's not odd to me and is the same as saying "who is deaf" (grammatically, not in definition). I googled the phrase and found a few reputable sources using the phrase
  • "E! said: "We can't" — Optional suggestion. A cable channel does not say, though it issues statement.
    • Revised
  • Citations for Filmography? Most of the films are mentionned and cited in the prose, but Role needs citations. It would be better, I think, if you could add citation for individial films (as done in various other filmographic FLs)
    • IMO, it's not necessary except for uncredited roles, but I added refs anyways.

– Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:17, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Responded to your comments :)​ Pamzeis (talk) 16:11, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Very happy to support this article! Do you know any other FA promoted when the subject was this young? But that should not be an issue. In my opinion, this article meets WP:FA?#1e. If you have time and inclination, would appreciate your review for any of these articles. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 16:32, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you for your help! Pamzeis (talk) 02:55, 14 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Support from Gog the Mild edit

Recusing to review.

  • Give the full date of birth in the main article.
    • The full DOB was removed in an edit that said a social media post is not good enough to provide a full DOB. I didn't notice it had been re-added; removed for now
  • "As of 2016, Shaylee attended a deaf school." Is six-year-old information relevant?
    • Removed
  • Could it be explained what "ASL Nook" is.
    • Can you expand on this request? The article already states "a website and YouTube channel that teaches American Sign Language (ASL)"
  • "In 2015, she enacted Rudolph the Red-Nosed Reindeer; HuffPost called her retelling of The Polar Express "beautiful ... like you've never seen before"." 1. Why the semi colon? I don't see the connection. 2. When did Mansfield sign The Polar Express?
    • Fixed
  • "Three years later, due to this event". Could you give some detail on how/why the two events were connected.
    • The source doesn't really mention anything, only that "The Mansfield family must have shared that magical moment with Disney"
  • "The family met an actor dressed as Minnie Mouse who had recently begun learning sign language." How is this relevant? (One assumes Mansfield has met many people learning sign language, of various professions.)
    • This was the subject of the video. I have tried to clarify it
  • "becoming the second-most-watched of Disney's advertisements." I assume that the Unforgettable Stories video was an advertisement? If so, could this be made clear at first mention. If not, consider rephrasing.
    • Revised
  • " "when we see the Mansfield family's moment, we feel that same joy in ourselves" ". I am lost here; what moment?
    • Removed
  • "deaf consultants on animated series Madagascar: A Little Wild". I really struggled to understand what you were saying here. Perhaps 'deaf consultants for the animated series Madagascar: A Little Wild'?
    • Done
  • "released a sticker that automatically transcribes speech in Stories". Could there be in line explanations of "sticker" and "Stories". Also suggest "Stories" → 'Instagram Stories'.
    • Done

Gog the Mild (talk) 18:53, 4 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Gog the Mild: Responded to your comments :) Pamzeis (talk) 06:09, 7 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Gog the Mild? Pamzeis (talk) 03:30, 12 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Nice work. Supporting. Gog the Mild (talk) 17:52, 13 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you so much! Pamzeis (talk) 01:39, 14 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - pass edit

  • You need to remain consistent in including website publishers. For example, you've done it with Rotten Tomatoes sources (Fandango Media) but not for others. Either do it for all or none at all.
    • Suppressed publishers
  • The article claims that "she is credited for her signed performance in the episode alongside the voice actors, the first such credit for a deaf actor" whereas the source says this is "possibly a first for deaf performers".
    • Revised
  • Spot-checked some other sources for accuracy of the article; no issues. FrB.TG (talk) 10:08, 19 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
    @FrB.TG: Hopefully all done. Pamzeis (talk) 01:33, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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