Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Led Zeppelin/archive3

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by GrahamColm 16:34, 21 July 2012 [1].

Led Zeppelin edit

Nominator(s): SabreBD (talk) 10:20, 23 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured article because the previous nomination fell through the grill. Solutions were attempted to all the issues raised, but commentators did not respond to those solutions, so I am unaware of any major outstanding issues. I believe it meets the FA criteria and as the second best selling band in the history of popular music the level of interest among readers should be high.SabreBD (talk) 10:20, 23 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - spotchecks not done. Nikkimaria (talk) 15:49, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Be consistent in whether you abbreviate page ranges

Fixed. 23.22.160.37 (talk) 22:14, 26 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

FN164, 165: page(s)?
What makes this a high-quality reliable source?
Connecticut is not abbreviated CN

Fixed. 23.22.160.37 (talk) 22:14, 26 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

BBC Home and similar: don't duplicate publisher as author in cases like this
Classic Rock: volume/issue, pages?
Be consistent in whether you provide state for NYC and SF
Fortnam: publisher, location, ISBN?
Grossman: formatting
Check alphabetization of references
Mojo: publisher?
Murray: what kind of source is this?
Reuters and similar: don't italicize agency/publisher
Compare formatting of Rolling Stone refs
Be consistent in whether you include retrieval dates for online newspaper/magazine articles. Nikkimaria (talk) 15:49, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comment – There's good material here and I enjoyed the article. I think it's close to satisfying the FA criteria and I'm leaning toward support. In addition to Nikkimaria's issues above, here are some specific concerns that can be addressed:

"...accompanied by record-breaking tours, which earned them a reputation for excess...": I think it was their behavior during the tours that earned them the reputation; not the tours themselves.
In the article body, the introduction of Jimmy Page lacks any context. It would help to say something like "In 1966, London-based studio session guitarist Jimmy Page joined...".
"gig" is an WP:IDIOM and so is to be avoided, although it is okay to use in a quotation.
"(he would later take the photograph that appeared on the back of Led Zeppelin's debut album)" disrupts the flow. Can this be worked into the text a little better?
"One account of how the new band's name was chosen..."; "which is said to have taken place"; "..said to be because..."; "...some suggest that these tales..."; "..have been interpreted as..."; "...some of which were said to be...": all appear to be examples of WP:WEASEL. It would be better to clarify their origin.
There are multiple instances of redundant use of "also". In most cases the statement should follow from the flow of text, so the "also" is unnecessary and should be removed. For example, "The band were also strongly influenced by the music...". In "...was an even greater commercial success than their first album...", "even" is redundant. (See User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a#Eliminating redundancy.)
"...before they moved to...": moved implies a change of residence. "travelled" (traveled?) may be more appropriate.
"...fuelling further hostility to the musical press": further hostility? When did the earlier instances occur? Is this hostility by the band or the fans? This could use some clarification.
"...on every studio album except one": which one?
"From the visit to Bron-Yur-Aur in 1970...": Bron-Yur-Aur needs a wikilink.
"...this assertion has been challenged": by whom?

Otherwise, a good job. Thanks. Regards, RJH (talk) 00:09, 12 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Well, it's been a week... RJH (talk) 22:41, 18 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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