Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/La Toya Jackson/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 16:57, 28 June 2007.

La Toya Jackson edit

This article is true star quality and deserves a spot on Wikipedia's front page. Rhythmnation2004 13:58, 20 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comment, nearly all of the information comes from two sources. -- Phoenix2 ^(holla) 16:14, 20 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Oppose The Cultural references section is trivia in disguise. The labels in the infobox should be formatted as a comma-separated list without parenthetical years. References should be formatted and not simply external links. There are two paragraphs that are only one or two sentences. And the article's hardly "comprehensive"; it doesn't even describe how her music sounded. ShadowHalo 17:42, 20 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Oppose -
1. The Notes and References section should be separated, for an example, see El Greco.
2. Online references are not formatted properly. See examples at {{cite web}}.
3. I refuse to believe that La Toya received only three awards and achievements. In other words, the awards and achievement section is too short either expand or remove.
4. There are several external jumps in the article, particularly in the Music career section. Should be switched to footnotes.
5. Early life and Music Career sections should be expanded. It fails the 1(b) criteria, this is not comprehensive enough.
6. Plus, whatever ShadowHalo and Phoenix2 said.
7. Lastly, why is there no link to this page in the discussion page?
  - I took care of that. -- Phoenix2 ^(holla) 22:02, 20 June 2007 (UTC)--Crzy cheetah 21:21, 20 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Oppose - This article is far below the benchmark which must be met for FA-promotion. You really should be using multi-cites for FAs, as you've really just repeated the same citations over. I also agree with ShadowHalo, the cultural references section is basically a trivia section. Finally, for this particular person the article is no where near long enough, and is far from providing a comprehensive look at her life. Paaerduag 07:47, 21 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Oppose it isn't nearly detailed enough to merit FA. The infobox needs a free image of some sort and i'm also not a fan of the bullets in the "cultural reference section". I think you should send it to peer review and at least try for GA before submitting it for FA. I'm not an expert on Laytoya Jackson, but in my opinion the article could be vastly extended. It does not seem complete.Legalbeaver 14:37, 22 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Oppose As Legalbeaver says, send to Wikipedia:Peer review. DrumCarton 18:48, 22 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Oppose - Image:Ltjcover.jpg has no fair-use rationale and is probably redundant to the first image in the "Playboy" section. Image:La Toya Jackson in Armed and Famous.jpg adds nothing to the article which isn't added by "She was in Armed and Famous" and is thus pretty decorative. (ESkog)^(Talk) 16:11, 27 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.