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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted 04:36, 22 January 2008.

Greatest Hits (Lost)

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Hello, I recently rewrote this article on the penultimate episode of the third season of Lost. Self-nominate, –thedemonhog talk • edits 19:36, 16 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Support per all concerns addressed at Wikipedia:Peer review/Greatest Hits (Lost)/archive1. Just a few things I didn't notice or may not have been there before:

  • The mention of Rose & Bernard's reappearance in the lead seems unnecessary. It's worth mentioning, but not notable enough to be in the lead IMO.
    • I added this so that there would be a mention of the production sentence in the lead, but it is now gone. –thedemonhog talk • edits 01:38 17 December 2007 (UTC)
  • Saying in the lead that the "first airing of this episode on the American Broadcasting Company in the United States and CTV in Canada on 16 May 2007 was viewed by 12 million Americans" seems a little contradictory when you're stating two countries it was aired in, but only one nationality of viewers. You should either separate the sentence somehow (to make it not sound like Canada's filled with Americans) or find some statistic of Canadian viewers.
  • What purpose does the '<br clear="all">' tag in Plot serve? All it does for me is make a little unnecessarily bigger break between two paragraphs. (But I guess it does depend on which server you're using or whether you have the TOC hidden/showing.
    • SilvaStorm recently added that and a picture, but I do not see why either are necessary. –thedemonhog talk • edits 01:38 17 December 2007 (UTC)
      • SilvaStorm has sneakily added both back. Why should we have the <br clear="all"> tag? –thedemonhog talk • edits 15:46 17 December 2007 (UTC)

Otherwise, good stuff. •97198 talk 01:24, 17 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Support. Meets all FA criteria, well done. -- Wikipedical (talk) 04:15, 17 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Support two great episode articles (maybe three), hope more come next. Also, see if the DVD featurette for "Greatest Hits" can provide more info. igordebraga ≠ 20:34, 23 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I actually thought that they didn't do a "Lost: On Location" for this episode, but I was wrong. I just got the DVD so I have added a sentence. –thedemonhog talk • edits 08:40, 26 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose. But I still can't see why you want to dilute your useful links with trivial ones to the major anglophone countries. Who's going to interrupt their read and rush to the US article? "Compare the season's average of 14.6 million."—This sentence suddenly addresses the reader directly; the tone needs to be recast. This is poorly written. Here are random examples from the top. Nearly every sentence needs fiddling. Don't just correct these examples: find someone to run through the whole article.

  • Some survivors prepare for an upcoming raid on their camp by the "Others,"—MOS breach, since the quote starts within one of WP's sentences. Period after the closing quote. Please audit throughout for this. "Some OF THE" would be clearer.
  • "Ben's adopted daughter Alex (Tania Raymonde) gets her boyfriend Karl (Blake Bashoff) to"—"Gets" is a little trashy here. "Persuades"?
  • "16 year island resident Danielle Rousseau (Mira Furlan)"—Yuck. Hyphen at least (16-year), if this hedgehog can't be recast.
  • Metrics equivalents?
  • "a cable he found 70 days prior[5] connects to this station"—get rid of this P word. What, tell me, is wrong with "before"?
  • "they will need someone to go on a probable suicide mission there, to which Charlie volunteers"—Is "to" the right word?

The content is just so trashy that I seriously wonder how we can call this "among our best work". To deliver it in trashy prose is even worse. Tony (talk) 00:47, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I have addressed your example concerns. Can you recommend someone to read it over? –thedemonhog talk • edits 01:15, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I have requested that the article be reviewed by the League of Copyeditors. –thedemonhog talk • edits 07:51, 28 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Yamanbaiia has run through the article. –thedemonhog talk • edits 02:27, 31 December 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I have asked Tony to further comment. –thedemonhog talk • edits 17:50, 6 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
The article has been edited for the new italicized concerns. –thedemonhog talk • edits 02:29, 8 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support, although I'd much rather prefer to see the Greatest Hits as a list than prose. Will (talk) 00:18, 10 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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