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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 30 April 2019 [1].

Flag of the Sakha Republic edit

Nominator(s): Jeromi Mikhael (talk) 15:24, 24 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about the flag of Sakha. The article itself is developed from various sources, mainly from the collections of the National Library of Yakutia. Please consider this article for entering the group of featured articles. Jeromi Mikhael (talk) 15:24, 24 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

SC edit

Oppose for now. I suggest you withdraw this nom, take the article through a good peer review and then bring it back.

General
  • The order looks wrong to me: I would expect the history (or a background section saying where the Sakha Republic is – possibly with a map for the ignorant amongst us) and how long it has been in existence. Then go into the history, then into the legislation which brought about the new flag, then the symbolism of the flag. There is no logic the way it is structed at the moment.
  • I suggest adding a brief background section: where Sakha is, how long it has been in existence as part (or not part) of Russia – certainly enough to cover the history of the flags you want to deal with
Lead/IB
  • "From top to bottom, the stripes are light blue (3/4 of the flag's width)": if we are working top to bottom, the stripes are not the flag's width – it is depth
  • You have mixed date formats (14 October 1992 and October 14, 1992, in the lead and IB for example)
  • No idea why there is the Yakut ASSR flag in the IB when it has its own article
History
  • The current history looks like it presumes a lot of fore-knowledge of the subject ("Before and after the civil war": the English civil war or the US one? No need to pipe the link. Needs a date to give us an idea of the timeframe too. Some of this can be dealt with by introducing a 'background' section
  • Bullet points are a no-no in my book except for brief lists. If you can put it into a paragraph of prose, so much the better. (Others may differ in their opinion)
  • There is quite a lot on the Yakut ASSR flag, considering it has its own article. It wouldn't be a problem if there was more on the Sakha flag, but there is nearly as much on the Yakut ASSR one as the Sakha one.
  • "The Republic of Sakha (Yakutia) has the State Emblem, the National Flag and the National Anthem.": no need to have this as a block quote – quoted within the text is enough
  • I'd expect to see more information on the designers within the "As the Sakha (Yakut) Republic" section: when were they commissioned, why them, how long did it take them, did they decide by a three-man committee, or did they have specific roles in the process.
Designers
  • Partly dealt with in the last comment above but, again, avoid bullet points
Sources
  • There are two sources cited but not used

There is some good information here, but it needs a bit more background and some details on the design etc of the flag. It needs to be reorganised a bit better and a very good polish before it comes back to FAC, I think. Cheers - SchroCat (talk) 11:50, 29 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Coord notes edit

Based on the above I'm going to archive this nom. I might add that some parts of the article appear unsourced (e.g. the Legislation section), which alone is enough to prevent promotion to FA; as a guide, at the very least every paragraph should end with a citation to a reliable source. I note also that the article appears not have been through GAN or Peer Review; while these are not required precursors to FAC, it does help to get as many eyes on an article as possible before bringing it here, and such reviews help. I think you'd also be eligible to try the FAC mentoring scheme. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 13:48, 30 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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