User talk:Se7enteen-century/The Jewish Cemetery

Latest comment: 1 year ago by Lunamoths in topic Peer Review

Peer Review edit

Hello!

Great start to the project! There are a few formatting errors such as the Introduction and Early Life portions being a subheading instead of a heading. I would also do some rearranging and put what was originally put regarding the painting at the top and then place the introduction after the description of the painting. I would also fix the formatting for the quote for John Smith and have it formatted the same way it was in the original so there isn't any confusion on who wrote it.

There are no citations, so I would add that. The "Early Life" section is a bit unneeded as there is already a page based on the artist.

In "Subject and Symbols, there is an incomplete sentence. I would remove the part where it talks about how the painting evokes emotion as that is subjective.

"Location and Context" also has an incomplete sentence in the beginning. This is a great section to be included. For the last line, I would say that it is unknown wether or not the painting was commissioned or owned in a private collection, or even just delete the sentence itself as it is not necessary.

There are a couple of grammar and punctuation errors throughout. When talking about the painting, make sure to put it in quotes or italics such as Jacob van Ruisdael's "Cemetery"

Great start!

-Sam Lunamoths (talk) 22:23, 4 April 2023 (UTC)Reply