Mhan818
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:06, 5 January 2022 (UTC)
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This is a great page! I don't really know what's going on but if I had the time and wasn't lazy I'd be clicking the links you provided to other wikipedia pages which I think is good for the level that these things have to be written in. I think if you want to make this article a little more readable to people not in the field, you can replace or expand upon some words like "assemblages", "free fluid environment", maybe add a link to a page for halides, and a link to a page for cloudy diamonds. If not available, maybe briefly explain them? I'm not sure at what level these should be written at since I got a "be careful not to write at a high level" warning on my quiz thing for this, so I could be totally wrong, but it does read a little bit higher level and there are geology-specific words that I'm not familiar with.
Two little things too: "Sub-lithospheric mineral inclusions such as majorite, carbon- and magnesium-rich perovskite can be also classified into ultramafic type (peridotitic) and basaltic type (eclogitic) inclusions. However, the classification is harder than the lithospheric inclusions due to their rarity of samples, small grain size, and difficulties in recognizing the original assemblages under deep-mantle conditions." --> Sub-lithospheric mineral inclusions such as majorite and carbon- and magnesium-rich perovskite can be also classified into ultramafic type (peridotitic) and basaltic type (eclogitic) inclusions. However, these additional classifications are harder than the lithospheric inclusions due to their rarity of samples, small grain size, and difficulties in recognizing the original assemblages under deep-mantle conditions.
"The timing of the mineral crystallization can categorize the mineral inclusions into three types which are protogenetic, syngenetic, and epigenetic inclusions" --> The timing of the mineral crystallization can categorize the mineral inclusions into three types: protogenetic, syngenetic, and epigenetic inclusions
Other than that I think this is a super cool article! You're a fantastic writer and I learned a lot. Good luck! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mvida (talk • contribs) 03:33, 22 February 2022 (UTC)