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The Greek idolize heroes who fallen at war, to dye on the battleground was a great honor it depicted courage and strength. When a hero died it was though that they become immortal because they prove themselves to the Gods. [1]
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It looks like you have a good collection of sources to choose from when improving this article.
I like the flow of the Lead Section you have worked on so far and think that the use of the brief mythological background of Hercules helps the article lead section read well. Also, the devision of the lead section is a good idea since there are different topics that relate to the statue itself but should not necessarily be included in one paragraph.
Remember to make sure that your sentences read in a concise and cohesive manner. Example, "was carved onto it and it been struck by lightning." should be reworded.
"Both sculptures display contrapposto, which is a typical style from Lysippos where the figures’ weight is thrown entirely on one foot."- Try to word the use of contrapposto display in the statue and more being employed by Lysippos to depict certain aspects of posture and feeling with the pose instead of using "typical style" which would instead refer to Lysippos using the contrapposto pose more often than not, which would be hard to prove.
You could expand on how the Hellenistic style characteristics are usually identified with. Such as dramatic and even possibly over exaggerated.
When referencing Herakles as the Greek originator of the hero Hercules, it would help to put that Herakles is Hercules in ancient Greek culture instead of just Greek.
When you mention the location of the statue now, you could mention what specific museum the statue is now housed in to give a little more specific information.
_Dbeat87 (talk) 00:19, 27 October 2017 (UTC)
- ^ Spivey, Nigel (2012). Greek sculpture. Cambridge [u.a.]: Cambridge Univ. Press. ISBN 978-0521756983.