MariahBeebe
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 04:38, 27 January 2016 (UTC)
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Hi, MariahBeebe -- welcome to Wikipedia! As Ian mentioned, the Teahouse is a great resource for new editors. But did you know that Wikipedia also has an extensive help library for common questions? Of course, if you run into a question or problem, you're always welcome to get in touch with me either by email or on my talk page. Happy editing! Fraudoktorkatie (talk) 14:53, 27 January 2016 (UTC)
SIDS - Kelli Broessel Peer Review edit
Hello Mariah!
I thought that this topic is very interesting because babies dying isn't really something you think about since they were just born! But from what I read in your article first draft it really makes me think about it as a more serious issue. I think that specifically in the first paragraph the last sentence it might sound better to say "So, in scientific terms..." instead of science speaking it just might flow better and sound more professional. I think that also when you say "long-winded" process you might want to change it to say exactly what you mean. Sometimes the phrases or sayings that are common to us another person in another country looking at your article might not get. I also think it might be better to summarize or reword the definitions that are in quotations or say something like "According to (source) brain abnormalities, low birth weight..." so that you don't have quotations in your Wikipedia article. Aside from those specific things I think that going through and making sure that your sentences are broken up and don't try to pack too many ideas into the same one. I am a lover of the run on sentences but when I read it back I realize how many things I'm trying to pack into this one sentence. One thing that really helps when I'm editing is reading my writing out loud to someone else. In your head you fix little things and when you say it out loud you catch those little mistakes or missing words here and there and realize what sounds good and bad when you actually read it back.
But overal I think you have some really solid background and I would like to see more about prevention of SIDS and if there are maybe any products that parents could look into that may have been successful in preventing this awful occurrence. Overall I think your layout was really good and if you just keep finding good sources and adding to the information you already have you'll be golden. Can't wait to see how it turns out!
Kelli Broessel (talk)Kelli Broessel
Peer Review SIDS - Drew Amstutz edit
Hi Mariah,
I’m very happy I got assigned to your topic because its something I have no knowledge about sadly and that definitely changed. I was a little confused as to if this one just one whole section that you added in or if it is split up through out the article. I learned quite a bit of information from just reading your edits before reading the actual article and I think you did a wonderful job! It surprised me very much to here that research for this goes back a few hundred years and till this day there is a still some mystery to it. There is one sentence that I don’t particularly like, “So, in science speaking terms, SIDS is very new.” I think it might just be that you used “so” in the beginning of the sentence. I understand what you are trying to say, but maybe it could be said differently some how? Also, do you think that alcohol or smoking during pregnancy could be factors? Maybe that could be something to look up information on. I’ve been trying to figure how I can relate this to my topic, but I cant see to think of anything since they are quite different. I know that the putrefaction process of an infant would be faster. Maybe I can expand on that idea for one of the factors affecting and state more about why that is likely?
Overall I can’t wait to see your final changes to the article because I would really like to learn more about it. Just out of curiosity is there a certain reason as to why you chose this article? Also, thank you very much for the feedback I greatly appreciate it!
Hello, I'm Jytdog. I noticed that you made a change to an article, Sudden infant death syndrome, but you didn't provide a reliable source. It's been removed and archived in the page history for now, but if you'd like to include a citation and re-add it, please do so! If you need guidance on referencing, please see the referencing for beginners tutorial, or if you think I made a mistake, you can leave me a message on my talk page. Thank you. Jytdog (talk) 01:12, 26 April 2016 (UTC)
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Remember that when adding content about health, please only use high-quality reliable sources as references. We typically use review articles, major textbooks and position statements of national or international organizations. WP:MEDHOW walks you through editing step by step. A list of resources to help edit health content can be found here. The edit box has a build in citation tool to easily format references based on the PMID or ISBN. We also provide style advice about the structure and content of medicine-related encyclopedia articles. The welcome page is another good place to learn about editing the encyclopedia. If you have any questions, please feel free to drop me a note. Jytdog (talk) 01:12, 26 April 2016 (UTC)