Hi Kylie! Jacob here! Hope you had a good Thanksgiving.
I think that this draft is a great start to a fruit section of the ovary article. I like how succinct, informative, and easy to read it is. I think that your diagram is superb. However, I think there are areas of improvement to be made. However, please take my advice with a grain of salt, I am merely reading the rubric and giving my thoughts on how your article fits into the rubric. I am by no means an expert on plant fruits.
I will begin by addressing the questions that you posed at the end of the draft:
Is there anything in this you think I should expand more on?
I think there is a lot of detailed information in the article about fruits, but not enough detailed information about actual ovaries. You do a great job defining what an ovary is, but do not go into specifics. I also think that this is a great place to talk about the difference between gymnosperms and angiosperms. Gymnosperm seeds are not covered by an ovary while angiosperm seeds are. You could also go into the adaptive significance of an ovary and how it leads to the creation of a fruit. What kinds of transformations happen that make an ovary into a fruit? What is the diversity of fruits and can this diversity be explained in part by the number of ovaries that create each fruit?
I think I'll add something about dry fruits that you might not think are fruits in the first paragraph and was planning to put it in the last sentence.
I think this is a great idea.
Would it be helpful to have more information about the anatomy of an ovary?
I think it could be helpful, but is not necessarily fitting for this kind of article.
Now onto my general comments:
I think you have 7 good, recent references all later than 2000. I think this a great start, but you could do more. 7 is the minimum.
You have a great, simple diagram, but the rubric also calls for a picture, so try to find a picture or suite of pictures to go with the diagram. Maybe one for a multiple fruit, aggregate fruit, and simple fruit.
Your tone is great and fits exactly what one would expect from a wikipedia article. I would just work on touching up some grammar here and there.
I think you have a perfect amount of links.
Judging by eye, it looks like your article might be a little short of 500 words as advised by the rubric, so maybe break it up into subsections and add more detail about how the ovary actually changing into the fruit.
Overall, I think this is a really strong draft and well on its way to being a great article. I can't wait to see it when it's finished.
Jlwatts98 (talk) 05:25, 28 November 2020 (UTC)
- Hi Jacob, thanks for your thoughtful comments! I included much of what you addressed into my draft. I believe I addressed some of the diversity of fruits in the different types that are explained in the last section. I am trying to incorporate the pictures you mentioned because it is a great idea, but I’m not sure what that will look like quite yet. Overall, your suggestions were helpful, and I appreciate your input! KylieG (talk) 17:40, 13 December 2020 (UTC)