User talk:Icy13/Deep state

Hi Icy13, I have compared your version to the live article and will be evaluating the content you've added or changed.

• Section titles are in "Sentence case" not "Title Case"--only the first word of a section title and any proper nouns are capitalized. So instead of "Scholarly Understanding", it should be "Scholarly understanding" (there are others that need to be fixed as well)
• The first paragraph of "Scholarly understanding" doesn't have any citations. You'll want to include those so it's clear that you are not publishing original thoughts/your opinions on the topic.
• Good job of removing the relative time references "to this day"! Relative time differences have no place on Wikipedia
• A small quibble, but Wikipedia's style guide says not to use apostrophes to indicated decades. So you'd want "1970s" instead of "1970's"
• The content you've added so far looks well structured! I like how you're using the hidden comments to help organize your thoughts--I do the same thing :)

As far as the article in general:

• There is an excessive number of in-text citations in the section for the "United States of America" subsection (which should just be "United States", btw per the style guide) I don't know if I've ever seen 13 in-text citations after a sentence before, and it's absurd. I think three at most is fine.
• For continuity, consider changing the hatnotes in the sections. The beginning of the article uses "see also" hatnotes in the sections, but in the US section it uses "main article" and then in Venezuela it says "further information". I don't think this is a policy, but I think it would look better

Let me know if you have any questions! Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:31, 18 February 2020 (UTC)