User talk:Esong024/David Moses Bridges

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Iaguayo

Hello, To start, your Wiki page is really solid and has great information! Overall you supplied good details about the artist. The only changes I suggest are to add citations throughout your paragraphs and correct some formatting and typos. Also, add some more information and resources if you can. Correcting these would further develop your article and also prevent it from getting taken down. I liked how you organized your resources and will try that out on mine! For the lead paragraph, you give a nice overview of David Moses Bridges life. I am a little confused on what traditional birch canoes are and how he is the ‘creator’ of them. Also I think the details about his family and his later life would be better saved for the Early Life section. There are some typos where words are repeated, such as the one talking about his Grandfather. Overall, it’s a solid overview and I recommend trimming it to the main details about Bridges and his art and citing resources. For structure, you did a really good job. All sections are easily identifiable. I suggest moving the Education section to underneath the Early Life section. Also, I would relabel the Biography section to your artists name since it’s your lead paragraph and add ‘Solo Exhibitions’ to the Exhibitions section. Each section is mostly balanced. I would like to know more about how Bridges creates his canoes and what they look like and what others have said about them. Details about what reviewers have described his work or this style of art would be nice. More information on his artwork style would balance the personal life information. For tone, you do a pretty good job of staying neutral. I would revise the biography and early life sections where you use estimates such as “pretty big”, “about 10 years”, “mainly grew up”, “once in a while” etc. The more specific the better, it helps establish credibility. Also, I recommend changing words so that they are neutral such as “Unfortunately”. Other than that, your point of views and tone are really neutral and set to go. For sources, I strongly suggest adding citations throughout your paragraphs and bullet points. All of your cited resources look credible and trustworthy, if you can find more academic ones definitely use them. Without cited sources you are putting your article is at risk of being taken down as not credible. Only thing to change is add citations. Overall, great article just a few corrections and you will be ready to go. I can’t wait to know more about David Moses Bridges. --Bmbrizuela (talk) 19:29, 22 February 2020 (UTC)Reply

Hi, for the little box go to insert and then click template. In the search box that pops up, type in infobox person. Click on the template that matches and it should insert one on to your page. If not, click on a few of the templates until it pops up. For your sources, I meant adding the little citation footnotes throughout your paragraphs. If you click cite, it will create one wherever you are currently typing. You can manually type in the source or just paste the link and it will do it for you. If you have more questions about the peer review let me know. Thanks! Bmbrizuela (talk) 16:38, 25 February 2020 (UTC)Reply

So, I'm here because you asked me how I put the picture up on my wiki page. Well, first let me tell you I struggled a lot, maybe because at first, I tried to do it by myself until I realized I had no clue what I was doing. So eventually I had to go back to the training where they explain how to add images and stuff like that. Then I went onto the link it suggested in the training and there I had to search for a picture of my artist that was available to the public/for public use. Again, this was tough for me because my artist is not so popular and is still on the come up. However, I did manage to find one picture (the one I have on my page) of when she was present at some type of art event, that's why the picture doesn't look so professional. If your artist is well known you probably won't struggle with that. Then I had to save it and put it through this type of converter on wiki so they can check if its okay to use. I had to do a lot of back and forth between the tabs because you have to also figure out what type of file it is and stuff like that. (I'm not tech-savvy or anything, I'm literally like a grandma when it comes to computers so I might be overcomplicating it, but the training does a good job of taking you step by step with it).

Good luck! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Iaguayo (talkcontribs) 18:03, 27 February 2020 (UTC)Reply