User talk:Clara.roeder/sandbox

FOR MIDTERM: — Preceding unsigned comment added by Clara.roeder (talk • contribs) 16:35, 31 May 2017 (UTC) Provided below are some edits. I hope they help!
PARAGRAPH 1:

• The title “history of scientific understanding” feels a tad lengthy for a wikipedia article. Perhaps find a more concise way of saying the same thing?
• I don’t know if the thesis-esque introduction sentence is necessary for a wikipedia article.
• “peak popularity of a theological concept called the Great Chain of Being, “ this phrase feels a little strained. Maybe rephrase the entire sentence because there seems to be a repetition of the creationist concept reaching a heyday and that heyday being a peak of the single concept you then mention.
• Really great linking to other articles
• “an opponent of extinction.[2][4] famously denying” period should be a comma

PARAGRAPH 2:

• “that appeared unlike any living species.” How so? Or rather how can you make this statement more specific?
• “community embarked on a fascinating voyage of creative rationalization,” some of the modifiers like “fascinating” seem to be based on opinion.
• “Robert Hooke presented the impression of “ based on sentence structure later on, consider change “the impression” to “an impression”
• “and quite unlike” the word “quite” feels unnecessary
• I really like the chronological layout approach you take to the topic
• You include a variety of viewpoints

PARAGRAPH 3:

• “was a gifted geologist” like earlier, this statement feels biased.

OVERALL

Really nice article, it was informative and interesting. I thought your use of citations and links to related articles was great, and the viewpoints you emphasized were informative and comprehensive. In terms of improving the article, there are only a few places where you should be aware of potential biases, making statements more specific, and phrasing. Cmedvid (talk) 05:13, 5 May 2017 (UTC)

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Thank you so much for your valuable edits. I really appreciate them! --limulus120 16:57, 5 May 2017 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Clara.roeder (talk • contribs)

Evan Mayer peer review for final

• Good work breaking down a subject with a lot of historical twists and turns, while presenting many different points of view.
• Not much to say here. It's a solid article, written in plain English, with plenty of citations, lots of inline wikipedia links, and appears impartial.
• If this new section in your sandbox will appear contiguously on the parent page together with the section above, you might want to consider breaking it down into a couple of subsections to make it a little more digestible. Maybe gradualism, uniformitarianism, etc?
• "uniformitarianism. [11]" had a tiny space after the period. I just fixed it for you.
• Looks ready for mainspace, regardless!

Evanmayer1 (talk) 03:59, 2 June 2017 (UTC)