User talk:Azurashi/sandbox

Latest comment: 8 years ago by DerikWP in topic DerikWP Review x2

DerikWP Peer Review edit

Hi Azurashi,

I added a couple comments to your sandbox page. This article seems pretty well developed for most parts, but there is still plenty to expand on. Especially in the recent years, there have been some huge advances in wearables that you could definitely include.


DerikWP (talk) 17:23, 25 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

Blin1095 Peer Review edit

Hi Azurashi,

I made a couple comments regarding the structure of the article. Some parts are a bit hard to read, perhaps changing the language would help. Overall, the article seems pretty well made besides some wording. There are some places that need expansion and cleaning up, I've addressed some issues in comments in the draft. The 2010s wearable section seems a bit lacking in the technology. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Blin1095 (talkcontribs) 19:50, 26 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

DerikWP Review x2 edit

Howdy.

It looks like you're making some good progress. The comments you've added stating your intentions seem to be pretty solid. I've added several specific comments throughout the article that you can review. Feel free to let me know if you need a second opinion on anything!

DerikWP (talk) 16:13, 2 April 2016 (UTC)Reply