Review of article in sandbox edit

Good effort and source selection! You may want to consider where to place the citation in the first paragraph, it might go better after the first sentence you added rather than the last so the reader knows where the info is coming from.

There appears to be a small typo with a [ after the link to To Perpetual Peace.

The last part about Keohane & Nye doesn't belong in an Early History section - I suggest moving it into another section.

Thank you for your review. I agree with all of your tips and am in the process of changing my article. I moved the citation to the first sentence in the first paragraph in order to make the information more clear. I realize that putting it there gives the reader a better understanding of the source right from the beginning.

Also, I created a new section for the information about Keohane and Nye. I am still deciding if it should go under history as "Liberal Theory Today" or if it should be under its own section. Furthermore, I will edit the beginning of that section so that it makes sense on its own.

Thank you again for your review! The tips were very helpful.

Kwaddick (talk) 01:57, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Erickaakcire (talk) 17:04, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

Three Article Ideas edit

  1. I could edit the History of Sound Recording page because we just learned about it in class and I could fine reliable sources to back up my information. The page's lead section needs to be improved/increased and certain sections need citations to be added. I feel that I could tackle both of these things.
  2. I could expand on the page about Ami Vitale, a photographer for National Geographic. Her page is a stub and I feel like I could find information about her and her work to make the page better.
  3. The page on Insomnia Cookies reads like an advertisement and does not have enough citations. I could expand this page and edit the existing content so it does not read like an advertisement and instead is an informational page about the companies history.

I think option 2 has the best chance of success. You are welcome to move forward drafting the article. Erickaakcire (talk) 20:38, 27 September 2016 (UTC)