* Large sections are unreferenced (the History section, the Education section) or mostly unreferenced (Sports, Architecture, Arts and Culture, Administration among others).
Gallery in the middle.Overlinking - meridian and parallel in the location section, boars, badgers, foxes, rabbits, squirrels, etc.- Prose is clunky and is unencyclopedic. expample is
"Historic rock bands from 1970s, like Compact, modern pop musicians, like Cristina Rus or Andra, underground sounds like Luna Amară as well as a large pallet of electronic music seem to mix quite well within the city's eclectic music scene."but many others could be put forth. Peacock terms - "The Gallery of Folk Art is also distinguished, as it promotes the authentic products and art of the Romanian culture, in the field of interior decoration." "Iuliu Maniu street is considered to be an important landmark of the city, as it is built completely symmetrically after the Haussmann urbanistic trend." etc.- Eliminated peacock terms. Hopefuly there are no more.Lead is short for an article of this length- Personal preference, but I would like to see more english language sources, if at all possible.
References need a consistent format.- Lists of redlinks?
I got at least one dead link in the external links checker (It tried to time out on me at some point).//Ealdgyth | Talk 23:36, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
I recognize that it was translated from another language Wikipedia, but the FA standards require inline citations of any information considered contentious. There are LOTS of parts that could be considered contentious that are lacking inline citations. Starting at the top:The theories of the origin of the name. Who came up with those theories? Without attribution they are considered Original research."This castle was designated on many ocassions as the "Transylvanian Versailles"".. by whom?"This monastery hosts the renowned wonder Madonna of Nicula." and the sections following it."The locality was later raised to the status of a colonia, probably during the reign of Marcus Aurelius." Probably? Are there other theories?"In 1270 Kolozsvár (the castle and the village) was donated (so thus degraded) to the bishopric of Transylvania. In 1316 received town privileges from Charles I of Hungary and to the memory of this event they began building the Saint Michael Church." Why was is it "thus degraded"? Why do we know it was in memory?// Ealdgyth | Talk 15:48, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
- Oppose
Another problem: look at the section #Transport and wikifich the titles of the subsections. // MOJSKA 666 (msg) 15:04, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
Comment Per WP:MOS#Images, “sandwiching” of text between images is to be avoided. The number of images appears to be well beyond superfluous. Wikipedia articles should not be image depositories; that’s what Wikimedia Commons is for. // ЭLСОВВОLД talk 14:27, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
- You've addressed some of the reference concerns but the prose issues still remain. It very much reads like what it is, a translation from another language.
I highly highly highly suggest finding at least two copy-editors who speak English very well to read over and thoroughly massage the text, as it is very clunky through out. I could point out examples, but the whole text needs work, and it isn't a FAC reviewers job to do that, honestly.It has the basis of a good article, but it needs a LOT of work. I am not knocking the work you've put into it, but practically every sentence needs work, which is well beyond what any reviewer is expected to point out.Examples within the first four sentences include "The city lies in the valley of the Someşul Mic river and it used to be the capital of the historical province of Transylvania." which is clunky and combines two different subjects into one sentence, and "The population of the Cluj-Napoca metropolitan area, as proposed by the current project is estimated at 360,000." which has the very odd "proposed by the current project" which is totally unexplained and odd connected with the population. That's a mere sample. The very next sentence is "Finally the population of the influence area (periurban area) counts over 400 thousand residents." Finally? Why finally? Periurban? Influence area? counts over? That sentence is awkward. Once again, I highly reccommend taking this to the Wikipedia:WikiProject League of Copyeditors for help.Ealdgyth - Talk 16:36, 15 March 2008 (UTC)
- You've addressed some of the reference concerns but the prose issues still remain. It very much reads like what it is, a translation from another language.
- Oppose Sorry. The prose is very poor indeed.
Here are some random examples from the Lead:
"as proposed by the current project" by the current project?- replaced with planned"Finally the population of the influence area" What's final about it?replaced with last"The city spreads circle-wise from" Circle-wise ?- replaced with "the city spreads toward St. Michael's...""due to come to international spotlight"?- replaced with "top five places worldwide that are due their turn in the international spotlight during 2008" see [1]
There are dozens more like this in the article.--GrahamColmTalk 17:06, 15 March 2008 (UTC)
Oppose per criterion 1a. This article needs a serious copyedit or three. There are numerous typos (vecinity, consuquence, ciurcumsription, trolleybuss, ensambles, ocasion), mis-translated words (terasse, petrified, suveranity, interrogatories, novation, questionated, beggers), and sentences that simply don't parse in English. Further oddities (note that not all of these are strictly WP:WIAFA breaches):
THIS ARE PROPOSALS NOT MANDATORY CRITERIA
- The History section is nearly as long as the linked 'main article' history, and really needs paring down.
- Text is sandwiched between images in many places.
Some images are left-aligned directly after section headers.- There are so many redlinks that it's difficult to read past them.
- The table in the Sports section would be better rendered in prose.
Trivia and Gallery sections should really be worked into the article, not separate sections.- I mixed Trivia with the text of the article, but I preserved Gallery as a separate section, as there is no guideline that specifically advises not to include a gallery section.Reference formatting is really inconsistent. Some online sources lack retrieval dates.- This article relies so heavily on Romanian sources that it is very difficult to assess the reliability of the sources or to confirm what is cited.
The layout of sections does not follow the guidelines at WP:LAYOUT, particularly with regard to order of the sections External links, Notes, Footnotes, and References.// Maralia (talk) 18:35, 15 March 2008 (UTC)
Oppose on prose grounds (I've looked no further than this). The prose needs considerable work by an uninvolved copy-editor. A few examples:
The first written mention of its name was in 1213 under the Latin name Castrum Clus. Despite the fact that Clus as a county name appeared earlier in 1173 as Thomas comes Clusiensis, it is believed that the county's designation derives from the Roman camp (castrum) and not vice versa. I've read this three times and still don't fully understand what the vice versa refers to.- made clear :
The first written mention of its name – as a Royal Borough – was in 1213 under the Latin name Castrum Clus. However, despite the fact that Clus as a county name was recorded earlier, in the 1173 document Thomas comes Clusiensis, it is believed that the county's designation derives from the name of the castrum – that might existed prior to its first mention in 1213 – and not vice versa.
The area surrounding the city is vastly covered with forests and grass. Vastly covered?- eliminated vastlyRarely species of plants, like venus's slipper or iris, are to be found here. Rarely or rare? </strike - rareepigraphically attested Inadvertently humorous.- replaced with first recordedTypos: instutions, finaly, latteretcInconsistency of formats: "400 thousand" and "504,000"; "2nd century" and "12th century" but "tenth century".Commas used in percentages instead of points.- WP:ENGVAR mixes British spellings (neighbourhood) with American ones (skeptical). - I converted some words to the British spelling, but there might be others that I didn't notice
Date format: "October 11th" > "October 11" and again "October 16th".Also: distances need converting into yards/miles etc.// ROGER DAVIES talk 20:24, 15 March 2008 (UTC)