Link to Article Draft: https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Autumn029/sandbox/articledraft
Article evaluation edit
- There is no information as to why Gummy Sharks are called what they are.
- The author refers to "Bag limits" in the article, it is not linked to anther article on Wikipedia, so i don't know what it means.
- The edibility of these sharks are mentioned in the article but there is no inforation on the proper way to catch,
- Where is Victoria? The author mentions that in Victoria fisherman must abide by that "bag limit"
- Not that this could a problem but there are i noticed there are no quotes through out the article.
Article Draft Proposal edit
For my article edit, I intend to work on the Gummy shark article. This is a start class article with low importance. After conducting academic research on the topic of Mustelus antarcticus (the gummy shark) I am proposing to add more information about temperature sensitivity and the behavior of the species. I also intend to rearrange some of the information within the article to make it more cohesive for the audience. The information contained in the article as it is is very brief. There is a lot of important information that is not common knowledge mentioned through out the article that is not explained. I would like to add the explanations for these undefined terms. I plan to use "Temperature Insensitivity and Behavioral Reduction of the Physiological Stress Response to Longline Capture by the Gummy Shark, Mustelus antarcticus" By Leonardo Guida, Terence I. Walker and Richard D. Reina. I also intend to use "The Influence of Gummy Sharks, Mustelus Antarcticus, on Observed Fish Assemblage Structure" by J. Klages, A. Broad, B. P. Kelaher and A. R. Davis and "Pass the Salt Physiological" by Robert P. French, Jeremy Lyle, Sean Tracey, Suzanne Currie, and Jayson M. Semmens.
Gummy Shark-Article Draft edit
The gummy shark more formally known as the Mustelus antarcticus, is a shark in the Triakidae family. These small to medium size bottom-dwelling sharks are found mostly but not limited to the area around the southern seas of Australia is commonly baited and fished for cuisine because of its original yummy taste and its market prices. It is also known as Australian smooth hound, flake, Sweet William and smooth dog-shark.
Appearance edit
This species is a slender, light grey shark with white spots along the top and side of its body gets its name from its flat, plate-like teeth for crushing its shelled and non-shelled prey. It feeds on crustaceans, marine worms, small fish and cephalopods such as octopus, squid, cuttlefish, etc.[1]
Compared to the world’s largest fish, the whale shark, more formally known as the Rhincodon typus, which reaches maximum lengths of up to 12 meters long, the gummy shark can reach a maximum length of 157 cm for males and 175 cm for female. That makes this species of shark about 14 percent of the size of the whale shark. The minimum size for both male and female is 45 cm measured from the rear-most gill slit to the base of the tail fin. At birth, these sharks measure between 30 and 35 cm.[1]
Reproductive Tendencies edit
Gummy sharks are found to be mostly bottom dwellers in the waters around southern Australia, from Shark Bay in Western Australia to Port Stephens in New South Wales, from the surface down to a depth of 350 meters in moderate temperature water. The reproduction of the single sex school gummy sharks is ovoviviparous.[2] Ovoviviparous organisms are those who produce young via egg and hatched inside of the parent’s bodies. A common example of an ovoviviparous being is a seahorse. Females can have up to 57 pups per litter and are ready to do so by the age of five.[3] The average number of pups per liter birthed by the female Mustelus antarcticus is 14 but can have up to 57.[1][3] Male sharks are ready to reproduce by the age of four. Gestation takes approximately one year. The typical generation length for the gummy shark is 10 years and have an average life expectancy of 16 years. These sharks pose no known threat to beach goers or fisherman. This species is also of least concern in terms of endangerment according to the The IUCN Red List is an extensive list of species and where they fall on the endangered scale from “Least concern” (LC) to “Extinct” (EX).[3]
Fishing and Consumption edit
Gummy shark meat is often marketed as "flake" in southern Australia. Their boneless fillets have made them particularly popular within the fish and chip industry throughout Australia.[1]Although gummy sharks have not been over fished, they inhabit many of the same areas as school (snapper) sharks which have an established bycatch quota. This means fishers targeting gummy shark cannot have an adverse impact on the school shark population.[2] According to SharkSmart, roughly one hundred gummy sharks are tagged with “internal acoustic tags” in Western Australia to yield information about possible migration and travel habits.
Bag limits for recreational fishers in Victoria, Australia apply. Bag limits are laws placed on fisherman and hunters to limit the number of specific species they are allowed to catch, kill and/or keep. Fishermen have both a bag and a possession limit of two shark and/or school shark, landed whole or as a carcass. There is a 5 shark limit for large boats. If caught these sharks must be released if it is in total no larger than 75 cm or roughly two and a half feet. [4]
Peer Review edit
peer review Grant edit
I really like this draft is in great wiki form it stays in third Pearson and has no opinions. This topic pretty interesting to read but, also has many facts as well. When I first looked at the original gummy shark article it had little to any information, I see you added a lot more information on them that's nice. Things you could improve on is finding more information on the shark such as, how it actually got his name. You said something about them not having boneless fillets would that have something to do with their name. Also maybe are they just found in Australia can they be found anywhere else? Things also to think about what's their mane pray and are the prey themselves. This is a good start so far a lot of cool facts I just think their could be other stuff you can find on them. I cant wait to see what you come up with when your done.
Article Edits- Morgan Ward
There were only two issues I found in the article draft; grammar, and the length of the article. Having such a hard topic makes finding the resources and information you need not too easy. Other than the few grammatical mistakes, and shortness of the article, I think the article is being developed correctly. My advice for you would be to use the library webage, search deeper into the internet, and maybe look for books in the library regarding your topic. For my article I used the school’s handbook and realized that using a book could help immensely while writing my article. Using the IUP Libraries resources also did help me, and I did find some things in their archives on my articles topic. Those are just a few things you can use to find more information if you haven’t used them already. Other than that I think your article is on the right track and it looks like you are pulling it together well!
Vetter's Feedback edit
Hey Autumn! Nice work on this proposal. I think you've chosen a good candidate article for the project, and you have identified some very specific ways in which it could be improved. I especially appreciated your attention to thinking about audience needs. One of the goals of Wikipedia is to make information more accessible and comprehensible to a general audience, and you can certainly revise/or expand on information in the article to accomplish that goal. Let's talk about your sources, as I want to make sure you are on the right track with these and I'm not getting a lot of contextual information from them here. Moving into our next class, I would like you to begin identifying specific passages in your sources that contain information you can bring into the article. We'll do some in-class work on summarizing that information and beginning to draft your article on Tuesday. Good work on the proposal! Keep it up, and I look forward to our conference.
-Dr. Vetter
Reference List edit
- ^ a b c "Sharksmart - Keep enjoying the beach". Sharksmart. Retrieved 2018-03-29.
- ^ "Gummy Shark". "OCEAN TREASURES" Memorial Library. 2014-09-18. Retrieved 2018-03-29.
- ^ a b c "Mustelus antarcticus (Gummy Shark, Sweet William)". www.iucnredlist.org. Retrieved 2018-03-29.
- ^ "Gummy Shark". dpipwe.tas.gov.au. Retrieved 2018-03-29.
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