Template:Did you know nominations/William B. Cornwell

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The result was: promoted by Miyagawa (talk) 19:06, 29 September 2013 (UTC)

William B. Cornwell edit

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~~... that West Virginia railroad and timber executive William B. Cornwell (pictured) was rendered unconscious after a longcase clock toppled over and struck him in the head?~~

Reviewed: Apinac, Cape Mountain, Teatro Español (Madrid), and Royal touch

Created by Caponer (talk). Self nominated at 02:39, 26 August 2013 (UTC).

May I suggest a shorter hook? "...unconscious by a falling longcase clock?" Shorter is better, and I think this conveys the same meaning. Nyttend (talk) 02:53, 27 August 2013 (UTC)

Thanks Nyttend--I concur with your shorter hook. -- Caponer (talk) 10:17, 27 August 2013 (UTC)

ALT1: ... that West Virginia railroad and timber executive William B. Cornwell (pictured) was rendered unconscious by a falling longcase clock? -- Caponer (talk) 10:17, 27 August 2013 (UTC)

Article - moved from user space on 26 August, so new enough; 9299 characters of readable prose, so long enough; neutral; at least one inline citation to every paragraph; no copy vios detected using earwig/duplication detector; assessed as B class; no BLP issues but he died a long time ago!
Hook - ALT1 is within length criteria at 133 characters, which includes (pictured); correctly formatted; correctly cited/AGF supported (as my library no longer seems to have Proquest access) by ref #19 in 2nd para of 'Later life and death' section; and reasonably interesting.
QPQ done; image license is US PD (published pre 1923).

Looks fine although I'm not sure about having findagrave as an external link; I know it's not a reliable source and not used as such here, but does it need to be included? Doesn't affect DKK though. SagaciousPhil - Chat 09:45, 29 September 2013 (UTC)