Template:Did you know nominations/Tony's Cronies

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The result was: promoted by Gilderien Chat|List of good deeds 18:03, 19 May 2013 (UTC)

Tony's Cronies

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Tony Blair

  • ... that Tony's Cronies included Tony Blair's (pictured) former boss, school friend and office manager appointed to official positions because of their personal friendships with Blair?

Created by The C of E (talk). Self nominated at 07:32, 3 May 2013 (UTC).

  • Assuming the redirect thing is ok, then it would be good to go, I think. Long enough, hook cited online and very interesting. There might be a problem with the hookline though, as it appears to refer to three people but from what I can gather, the office manager and the school friend are the same person. A tweak may be necessary. -- Hillbillyholiday talk 23:52, 18 May 2013 (UTC)

Alt1: ... that Tony's Cronies included Tony Blair's (pictured) former boss as well as his school friend and office manager, appointed to official positions because of their personal friendships with Blair?

I think the "office manager" part is redundant. Also, I'm a bit concerned that the hookline statement is close to synthesis, maybe it would be better to say "reportedly because of their friendships", or something similar? Hillbillyholiday talk 12:50, 19 May 2013 (UTC)