Template:Did you know nominations/Silvia Perez Cruz
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The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 04:48, 15 June 2014 (UTC)
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Silvia Perez Cruz edit
... that Catalan singer Silvia Perez Cruz views songs as stories?
- Reviewed: Oscar Dystel
Created by I am One of Many (talk). Self nominated at 23:17, 8 June 2014 (UTC).
Article creation date and filing date okay, article length okay. Hook is dull – many singers think the same thing. But hook length and hook fact sourcing are okay. I've made a number of copyedits and cite formatting tweaks to the article, hopefully none are objectionable. QPQ checks out. Article is neutral, citing is inline although grouped at the end of multiple statements. No close paraphrasing detected in the English sources. Image is striking and under a CC license. But the article needs a better description of her music, per the Telegraph source – a mixture of jazz improvisation, flamenco and fado. That could then become part of the hook. I also think you should add the image to the hook. Wasted Time R (talk) 11:00, 11 June 2014 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review and the copyedits. A several of the errors are so annoying and due to automatic corrections my browser is making as I'm typing. When I wrote the hook I thought it was a bit boring too, but since that was the topic of the NPR story, I though maybe it isn't so boring to others. Anyway, I have written a new hook along the lines you suggested, which is clearly more interesting. I have added the sourcing information for the hook to the 11 de Novembre section. I am One of Many (talk) 15:43, 11 June 2014 (UTC)
- Oops, I forgot about your suggestion to use her picture, so I did. I am One of Many (talk) 16:08, 11 June 2014 (UTC)
- ALT1: ... that Catalan singer Silvia Perez Cruz's (pictured) songs have been described as a blend of music genres including fado, jazz improvisation, and flamenco?
Definitely better in my view with ALT1 and the picture. Good to go. Wasted Time R (talk) 01:01, 12 June 2014 (UTC)
