Template:Did you know nominations/J. H. Hobbs, Brockunier and Company

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The result was: promoted by PFHLai (talk) 17:24, 1 January 2014 (UTC)

J. H. Hobbs, Brockunier and Company edit

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~~... that J. H. Hobbs, Brockunier and Company (glass works pictured) developed an improved formula for lime glass that enabled American glass makers to produce high-quality glass at a lower cost?~~

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Created by TwoScars (talk). Nominated by Caponer (talk) at 03:13, 6 December 2013 (UTC).

There's a lot of repetition of "glass" in the hook, obviously some of it is necessary but maybe some could go? I've come up with this, but open to other suggestions;

ALT1 ... that J. H. Hobbs, Brockunier and Company (works pictured) developed an improved formula for lime glass that enabled American manufacturers to produce high-quality glass at a lower cost? --Bcp67 (talk) 19:22, 6 December 2013 (UTC)

BCP, you're absolutely right about there being too much "that" in the original hook, therefore I prefer your ALT1. Thank you for the suggestion! --Caponer (talk) 20:58, 6 December 2013 (UTC)

Full review needed of article and of ALT1 hook. BlueMoonset (talk) 07:07, 21 December 2013 (UTC)

This article is new enough and long enough. The hook is sourced and the image is in the public domain. Going with ALT1. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:48, 1 January 2014 (UTC)