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The result was: promoted by PFHLai (talk) 15:50, 1 May 2016 (UTC)
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Grace Banker edit
Grace Banker
... that Grace Banker (pictured) was awarded the Distinguished Service Medal for her services with the First Army headquarters during the St. Mihiel and Meuse-Argonne Offensives during World War I?
Created by Nvvchar (talk). Self-nominated at 02:03, 16 April 2016 (UTC).
This was a good read. Large enough, fully sourced, qpq done. Didn't detect any copyvio. The hook's a bit long, perhaps remove "with the First Army headquarters". --Al Ameer (talk) 22:22, 20 April 2016 (UTC)
- Al Ameer sonThanks for the review. As suggested here is shortened ALT1 hook
... that Grace Banker (pictured) was awarded the Distinguished Service Medal for her services during the St. Mihiel and Meuse-Argonne Offensives during World War I?Nvvchar. 01:38, 21 April 2016 (UTC)
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- It would be far more hooky if you said she worked as a telephone operator. Yoninah (talk) 23:27, 27 April 2016 (UTC)
- Yoninah Thanks. I suggest the following ALt2 hook
... that Grace Banker (pictured) served during World War I as Chief Operator of telephones of the American Expeditionary Forces (AEF) in the U.S. Army Signal Corps?Nvvchar. 02:13, 28 April 2016 (UTC)
- @Nvvchar: How about:
- ALT3: ... that Grace Banker and her team of telephone operators reported for work wearing helmets and gas masks? Yoninah (talk) 21:05, 30 April 2016 (UTC)
- Yoninah Thanks. I suggest the following ALt2 hook
- Al Ameer sonThanks for the review. As suggested here is shortened ALT1 hook
New reviewer needed for ALT3. Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 09:39, 1 May 2016 (UTC)