Template:Did you know nominations/Funso Ojo

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The result was: promoted by Vaticidalprophet (talk) 04:30, 9 September 2023 (UTC)

Funso Ojo

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Funso Ojo

... that Belgian footballer Funso Ojo (pictured) was named as Port Vale's PFA Community Player of the Year after saving more than 500kg of CO2 emissions from lifestyle changes and a switch to a plant-based diet? Source: "our PFA Community Player of the Year for the 2022/23 season following his inspiring approach to going green and finding ways to be kinder to the planet through PVFC Foundation’s relationship with nationwide campaign ‘Planet League’."
"Ojo has clocked up more than 260 activities that Green Football Weekend organisers say could amount to more than 500kg CO2e saved - roughly the same as a return flight from London to Cairo".
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Axel Lagerbielke

Improved to Good Article status by EchetusXe (talk). Self-nominated at 07:45, 22 August 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Funso Ojo; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

Image: Image is freely licensed, used in the article, and clear at 100px.
Freely licensed: Used in article: Clear at 100px:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: The article has just gained GA status; the hook is definitely interesting, and both its halves are correctly cited; your QPQ submission looks good. I'm only worried about the hook's length, which is very close to the 200-character limit... Also, I think you should specify that this happened in 2023. Still, it's a nice entry! Oltrepier (talk) 09:11, 22 August 2023 (UTC)

I'm happy for any suggestions on how to condense the hook.Echetus Xe 12:19, 22 August 2023 (UTC)

@EchetusXe: I would suggest to remove "Belgian footballer" (I don't think it's necessary here), and maybe re-word the last part as a more generic reference to environmentally friendly activities. Does it sound good? Oltrepier (talk) 13:55, 22 August 2023 (UTC)

How about alt1 ... that Funso Ojo (pictured) was named as Port Vale Football Club's PFA Community Player of the Year in 2023 for his efforts at becoming more environmentally friendly.?

@EchetusXe: That's better! "Port Vale" was fine as it was, though... Plus, "in 2023" might look better if placed right after the starting "that". Oltrepier (talk) 19:20, 22 August 2023 (UTC)

How about alt2 ... that in 2023, footballer Funso Ojo (pictured) was named as Port Vale's PFA Community Player of the Year for his efforts at becoming more environmentally friendly? Echetus Xe 19:48, 22 August 2023 (UTC)

@EchetusXe: Great! I've just quickly corrected two small punctuation typos on ALT2, but I think we're good to go now. Oltrepier (talk) 20:01, 22 August 2023 (UTC)

Perfect, thank you.Echetus Xe 20:15, 22 August 2023 (UTC)