Template:Did you know nominations/Fighting Irish (Family Guy)
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The result was: promoted by 97198 (talk) 13:30, 26 May 2015 (UTC)
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Fighting Irish (Family Guy) edit
... that Liam Neeson (pictured) voiced himself in the Family Guy episode "Fighting Irish", despite the show previously mocking his attempts at an American accent?
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Created/expanded by The Almightey Drill (talk). Self-nominated at 23:07, 4 May 2015 (UTC).
Three things: The citation fact must be directly cited in the article, and although the episode itself can be used to cite the fact, another source should be used. Second, combining two facts together which are not combined by an external source is synthesis. Third, the sourced content in the article is less that the 1,500 characters required for DYK because the plot is completely uncited. It would help if some of the plot was also cited. Δρ.Κ. λόγοςπράξις 21:26, 5 May 2015 (UTC)
- Dr.K. The hook was cited, but at the end of the next line, which may have been confusing. From this source: "This isn't the first time Neeson and his work have been lampooned on the show. Voice actor John Viener poked fun at Neeson's hopelessly unconvincing American accent in the episode "Prick Up Your Ears," while Neeson himself made a brief appearance last year in "Brian's a Bad Father." This episode offered Neeson a far meatier role as an antagonist to Peter." — Preceding unsigned comment added by The Almightey Drill (talk • contribs)
- ALT1:
... that when Liam Neeson (pictured) appeared on the Family Guy episode "Fighting Irish", he altered a line in order to correct his age when he filmed Taken?
ALT1 approved. Article satisfies length and newness criteria. No other issues detected. Good to go. Δρ.Κ. λόγοςπράξις 00:23, 6 May 2015 (UTC)- @The Almightey Drill:@Dr.K.: ALT1 isn't grammatically correct. You could say:
- ALT2:
... that when Liam Neeson (pictured) appeared on the Family Guy episode "Fighting Irish", he altered a line in order to correct the age he had been when he filmed Taken? - Personally, I find the hook obscure and not so hooky. Yoninah (talk) 17:43, 13 May 2015 (UTC)
- How about:
- ALT3:
... that Liam Neeson (pictured) promised to say any line that the writers of the Family Guy episode "Fighting Irish" wrote – except one?Yoninah (talk) 00:51, 21 May 2015 (UTC)
- Brilliant! But I can't pass a hook on my own nomination. '''tAD''' (talk) 05:11, 21 May 2015 (UTC)
Thanks. Could another reviewer sign off on ALT3? Yoninah (talk) 09:01, 21 May 2015 (UTC)
- The in-article hook does not have the verb "promised" or equivalent. The article curently states that
The show's staff were excited by the prospect of having Neeson say any line that they wrote
but imo this does not count as a "promise" on Neeson's part. The source has something to that effect but the article has to be modified to reflect it. Sorry about ALT1. When I fist saw ALT1 it didn't quite sound grammatically perfect but given I was on my vacation countdown I thought that any imperfections would be tweaked at the prep area. By the way pings don't work on templates. I just saw this from my watchlist. Δρ.Κ. λόγοςπράξις 15:55, 21 May 2015 (UTC)
- The source says that Neeson "was game" to say any line they wrote. Could we paraphrase that as "agreed" to say? Then we could have:
- ALT4: ... that Liam Neeson (pictured) agreed to say any line that the writers of the Family Guy episode "Fighting Irish" wrote – except one? Yoninah (talk) 16:41, 21 May 2015 (UTC)
- Or back to basics:
- ALT5: ... that Liam Neeson (pictured) said every line that the writers of the Family Guy episode "Fighting Irish" wrote for him – except one? Yoninah (talk) 16:43, 21 May 2015 (UTC)
