Template:Did you know nominations/Fannie Eleanor Williams

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:19, 8 October 2017 (UTC)

Fannie Eleanor Williams edit

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Fannie Eleanor Williams

~~... that the work of Fannie Eleanor Williams with the Australian Red Cross Transfusion Service led to the creation of a blood bank at the Royal Melbourne Hospital?~~
- ALT1: ~~... that Fannie Eleanor Williams was a senior researcher at the Walter and Eliza Hall Institute of Medical Research thanks to her experience and ability, as she had no degrees?~~
- ALT2: ... that Fannie Eleanor Williams trained new research staff at Walter and Eliza Hall Institute of Medical Research in animal care, the preparation of media and broths for bacterial culture, and glassblowing.

5x expanded by Catherine McLean (talk). Nominated by Reynardo (talk) at 11:46, 29 August 2017 (UTC).

The article is long enough, is neutral. Could not check the copyvio report since it did not work, but just a check of this sentence "In 1904, Williams began training as a nurse at the Adelaide Children's Hospital, and graduated in 1907. She was appointed sister in charge of the Thomas Elder Laboratory at the hospital later that year, and worked there for two years as an assistant to pathologist Dr Thomas Borthwick. In December 1909, Williams became a nurse inspector with the Unley Local Board of Health, for whom she undertook home visits and notified the council of infectious diseases." on google.com returned a match with [1], if the pdf is in PD fine, otherwise you should change the text a little more. The hook is neutral, short enough, interesting, is properly sourced with an inline source citation. I like better ALT1, second choice ALT0. The hook links were missing (Fannie Eleanor Williams). I added them. The article itself is adequately sourced and written in adequate English. QPQ not needed, Reynardo has only 1 DYK, Catherine McLean zero. Elisa.rolle (talk) 14:10, 1 September 2017 (UTC)

Sorry for the delayed response - have been busy at work and didn't see this until just now. The PDF is definitely freely available, not sure if it's public domain. Will adjust text shortly. Catherine McLean (talk) 02:32, 2 September 2017 (UTC)

Copyvio report now 18%, acceptable, good to go for me. Elisa.rolle (talk) 20:46, 7 September 2017 (UTC)

Several paragraphs lack any cites at all, per Rule D2. Yoninah (talk) 21:00, 18 September 2017 (UTC)

I've tagged the paragraphs in question. Elisa.rolle, just needs three citations. --Usernameunique (talk) 01:38, 19 September 2017 (UTC)

this is not my DYK please involve the right person. Elisa.rolle (talk) 06:07, 19 September 2017 (UTC)

Sorry about that, saw your comment above and mistakenly thought it was your nomination. @Catherine McLean and Reynardo: Could you add the three needed citations? --Usernameunique (talk) 07:35, 19 September 2017 (UTC)

@Usernameunique: newer users might not see the ping. I already placed a note on the page creator's talk page; I'll do the same for the nominator now. Yoninah (talk) 19:25, 19 September 2017 (UTC)

Sorry about the delay. I know Catherine is madly trying to get ready for a trip and writing stuff about stuff here. I'll try and get to this tomorrow. Reynardo (talk) 06:08, 20 September 2017 (UTC)

@Catherine McLean and Reynardo: Added the needed citations using a source already in the article. Restoring tick now that the issue has been resolved. --Usernameunique (talk) 03:43, 26 September 2017 (UTC)

Much thanks for that. Came by today (after being ill) to fix it, and found your fixes. You rock! Reynardo (talk) 01:49, 5 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi, I came by to promote this, but I don't find any of the hooks "hooky" enough. ALTS 1 and 2 are too wordy. You have something good in the lead, but the part about "particular expertise" is not sourced – or is it? I think it's fascinating that a woman would have this kind of expertise:

ALT3: ~~... that Fannie Eleanor Williams (pictured) had particular expertise in dysentery, hydatid disease, and snake venom?~~ Yoninah (talk) 19:43, 26 September 2017 (UTC)

How about this rewrite of the first one?

ALT4: ~~... that the work of Fannie Eleanor Williams (pictured) led to the first Australian blood bank?~~ Reynardo (talk) 01:49, 5 October 2017 (UTC)

Sorry, but I find the word "work" vague. Yoninah (talk) 18:11, 5 October 2017 (UTC)

Fair enough. How's this?

ALT5: ... that Fannie Eleanor Williams (pictured) created blood storage techniques used in the first Australian blood bank? Reynardo (talk) 05:04, 6 October 2017 (UTC)

OK. ALT5 offline ref AGF and cited inline. Rest of review per Usernameunique. ALT5 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 10:55, 6 October 2017 (UTC)