Template:Did you know nominations/Death and funeral of Bhumibol Adulyadej

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:15, 25 November 2016 (UTC)

Death and funeral of Bhumibol Adulyadej edit

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~~... that since the death of King Bhumibol Adulyadej, ultra-royalists in Thailand have violently harassed or threatened those who did not mourn the death or wear mourning black?~~

Reviewed: I believe I am still within the five nomination freebie area.
Comment: Kindly suggest other hooks if you could

Created by BTechTV (talk), Iudexvivorum (talk), YURi (talk), and Death Announce (talk). Nominated by The Emperor's New Spy (talk) at 05:39, 18 October 2016 (UTC).

The article is new enough (it covers a newsworthy current event), long enough (more than 4,200 characters) and within policy regarding neutrality, sourcing and avoidance of close paraphrasing (Earwig does detect a close paraphrase that is actually a direct quotation). The hook is within length, interesting and neutrally focuses on public aspects to mourning / non-mourning of the deceased monarch. QPQ obligation not required. Alansohn (talk) 01:27, 28 October 2016 (UTC)
Comment: The wording of the blurb is inaccurate, since the royal funeral has not ended (or has not yet taken place, depending on what you count as part of the funeral). Should probably just leave "and funeral" out of the blurb. (Personally, I'm not really convinced of the appropriateness of the blurb, as it's a sensitive issue, but nothing seems to be against policy.) Paul_012 (talk) 10:39, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

@Paul 012: How about now? The Emperor's New Spy (talk) 01:24, 29 October 2016 (UTC)

That resolves my concern. I'll leave it to the closing admin to decide whether a single longer link would be preferable. Paul_012 (talk) 08:55, 29 October 2016 (UTC)

Please add at least one cite to the 2nd paragraph under "Funeral" to satisfy Rule D2. Thank you, Yoninah (talk) 22:33, 12 November 2016 (UTC)

I have added citations to the paragraphs that lacked them. Mary Mark Ockerbloom (talk) 18:52, 16 November 2016 (UTC)

Thank you for adding this and other cites, Mary Mark Ockerbloom. I removed a bit of close paraphrasing from the lead. Restoring tick per Alansohn's review. Yoninah (talk) 20:08, 16 November 2016 (UTC)

I came to promote this but could not find evidence of violence and threats in the sources quoted. How about an alternative hook based on the rise in the cost of black shirts? Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:18, 17 November 2016 (UTC)

@Cwmhiraeth: here is the information in the source:
Now, as the nation enters its year of mourning, the division appears between black and non-black, with reports of some hard-line mourners berating people in who do not wear black in public. The harassment, reported by both eyewitness and social media accounts, comes at a time of heightened sensitivity following the death of His Majesty King Bhumibol, who was widely revered throughout his reign of 70 years. ... Well-known cartoonist Narong Jarungthamchot, who goes by his penname Kuat Kaihuaror, wrote online that two diners at a restaurant on Saturday hissed at him for wearing grey striped shirt.
Since the source only speaks of incidents of harrassment, not violence, I have corrected the sentence in the source and am amending the hook as follows:
ALT1: ... that since the death of King Bhumibol Adulyadej, ultra-royalists in Thailand have criticized and harassed those who did not wear mourning black? Yoninah (talk) 13:59, 17 November 2016 (UTC)

ALT1 seems fine to me, and is only the original hook reduced in scope. Restoring tick per Alansohn's review. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:14, 17 November 2016 (UTC)