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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:19, 23 October 2017 (UTC)

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Created by Gerda Arendt (talk). Self-nominated at 09:01, 5 September 2017 (UTC).

  • QPQ done, hook length is fine, newly created, in time, hook is interesting, AGF on source, long enough. Good to go! Adityavagarwal (talk) 09:33, 5 September 2017 (UTC)
  • The second and third paragraphs are completely unsourced, and these contain some of the hook facts, which also must be sourced, and by the end of the sentence that contain said facts. Since the hook says "married couples", the article needs to explicitly state this, not allow it to be inferred by mentioning people with the same name (they could, after all, be siblings). I was also wondering about her focus being "life and work of female and male musicians": why "female and male"? That's just musicians. However, if she focuses primarily on females, or females along with the males associated with them or married to them, that's significant. BlueMoonset (talk) 22:36, 22 September 2017 (UTC)
  • Understand, please wait, busy weekend. - "females along with the males associated with them" seems too clumsy for a hook, therefore I used "married couples", - could be "couples". It would be easy to have sources about the mentioned people having been married (until divorce) but do we really need them in Borchardt's article? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 06:52, 23 September 2017 (UTC)
BlueMoonset, I added some refs, please look again. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 08:37, 25 September 2017 (UTC)
If the relationships are too hard to word concisely, perhaps this, especially as Viardot is the dominant topic recently (and deserves a link rather than Joseph):
ALT1: ... that the musicologist Beatrix Borchard researched female musicians such as Clara Schumann, Amalie Joachim and Pauline Viardot, and worked for the Goethe-Institut in Portugal, Romania and China?
Gerda Arendt Two issues with ALT1. First, Borchard's research of Pauline Viardot is only mentioned in the lead, and without an inline citation; the body states that "She has been the editor of the Viardot Garcia studies.n[3]," (which itself appears to contain a typo, ".n"), but that does not explicitly say that it has anything to do with studying Viardot. Second, that Borchard worked for the Goethe-Institut in Portugal, Romania and China, lacks an inline citation. --Usernameunique (talk) 04:47, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
I duplicated the countries ref. For Pauline, I should change the wording, advice? The studies have been done (not only planned, This mentions that a book Viardot is planned to be published in 2018. Better wording welcome. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 05:52, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
@Usernameunique: If you are happy with the reference additions made by Gerda, could you give ALT1 a formal tick? Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:29, 20 October 2017 (UTC)
Issues resolved, looks good! --Usernameunique (talk) 03:58, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
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