Template:Did you know nominations/Aboakyer festival
- The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:52, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
Aboakyer festival edit
- ... that during the Aboakyer festival of the people of Winneba in Ghana the title of bravery is accorded the first warrior (warrior group pictured) group to capture a deer from a game reserve?
- Reviewed: Maria Teresa de Filippis
Created/expanded by Crosstemplejay (talk). Self nom at 20:45, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
Length, date of creation, image and hook are fine. I used the duplicate detector to compare the article with its main source and found some correspondence. However I think it is sufficiently different to pass muster. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:11, 16 December 2011 (UTC)
Close paraphrasing concerns. Example: "It was kept and protected till it could be written in English for all to read" is verbatim from the source. Nikkimaria (talk) 21:48, 16 December 2011 (UTC)
- Issue raised has been addressed. I believe it can be re-reviewed now. Thanks. CrossTempleJay → talk 10:48, 18 December 2011 (UTC)
Wording throughout the article is still too similar to the sources cited in footnotes 1 and 3. The example given earlier has been only partially fixed (compare "It was kept and protected till it could be written in English for all to read" in the source to "...till the Europeans arrived in the Gold Coast after which it was translated and written in English for all to read" in the article. Other examples:
- Source states: "The festival is also to ask the gods for a bumper harvest and their spiritual guidance throughout the year" and article states: "The festival is used also to ask the gods for a bumper harvest and their spiritual guidance throughout the year."
- Source states: "...from the ancient Western Sudan Empire where they were led by 2 brothers and a god called Otu."
- Article states: "...from the ancient Western Sudan Empire to their present land in the central coast of Ghana. During the migration, the people were led by two brothers and a god called Otu.
- Source states: "...they made an appeal to their god who asked for an animal from the wild cat family to be caught alive and beheaded before the god."
- Article states: "...an appeal was made to the god to change the sacrifice. The god then asked for an animal from the wild cat family to be caught alive and beheaded as the sacrifice."
- These are only examples. The problem is that large parts of the article seem to have been copied from the sources, often with only minimal changes. Rewriting is needed so that the information is presented in the the Wikipedia contributor's own words. --Orlady (talk) 04:44, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
Article re-written. Other issues raised have been addressed. CrossTempleJay → talk 09:57, 26 December 2011 (UTC)
