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The result was: promoted by RoySmith (talk) 13:34, 19 November 2022 (UTC)
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Şeyhmus Erdinç
... that Turkey national amputee footballer Şeyhmus Erdinç, who was born with a leg deformation, played in his childhood football at home with balls he made out of crumpled paper?Source: "...Ampute Futbol Milli Takım oyuncusu Şeyhmus Erdinç ...", "Doğuştan tek ayağı olmamasına rağmen ...", "Evde buruşturduğu kağıtlardan toplar yapan ..." (in Turkish) [1]
Created by CeeGee (talk). Self-nominated at 13:13, 20 October 2022 (UTC).
Full review to follow, but I'm not actually sure if "who was born with a leg deformation" is necessary in the hook given that it already mentions that he's an amputee footballer. In addition, the main hook fact is that he played with balls made of crumpled paper, so maybe focus on that instead? Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 11:16, 25 October 2022 (UTC)
- @Narutolovehinata5: It has been eleven days since you have started the review but not completed. You did not notice me by posting a note either about your comment on the hook. How long time will it take to complete your review? This is not the first time you act like this way. If you don't have time or interest, call a new reviewer. Besides, the additional phrase in the hook is mentioned to explain that he was already disabled when he played football with paper ball. CeeGee 01:35, 5 November 2022 (UTC)
I was waiting for a response for you before proceeding and I assumed you were checking the nomination regularly. You do have a point there so I'd like to hear from another editor if that part is necessary or not. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 02:34, 5 November 2022 (UTC)
- Don't assume that the nominator checks the nomination regularly., just post a note if you need a reply. Did you ask someone to help you in written? CeeGee 02:50, 5 November 2022 (UTC)
- Nice footballer bio; sorry it took so long to get reviewed. New enough (submitted within a week of creation), long enough, AGF on Turkish sources (which look good). QPQ is done. So the question remaining is the hook. Proposing ALT0a below:
- ALT0a ... that as a child, Turkey national amputee footballer Şeyhmus Erdinç played football at home with balls he made out of crumpled paper?
- Pinging @CeeGee: and @Narutolovehinata5: for feedback on above hook. And then we're good to go. And/or, in light of how long this has taken to get reviewed, would also happily accept third-party feedback on the revised hook from anyone who happens to scroll by. Thanks in advance. Cielquiparle (talk) 12:23, 19 November 2022 (UTC)
- I think that's a much better hook than the original. I think merely mentioning that he's an amputee footballer is enough to intrigue readers, it's not necessary to mention the leg deformation. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 12:29, 19 November 2022 (UTC)
- @Cielquiparle: Thank you very much indeed for your review and the ALT-hook, for which I have no objection. CeeGee 12:37, 19 November 2022 (UTC)
- I think that's a much better hook than the original. I think merely mentioning that he's an amputee footballer is enough to intrigue readers, it's not necessary to mention the leg deformation. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 12:29, 19 November 2022 (UTC)
Approved and good to go with ALT0a per above review and discussion. Cielquiparle (talk) 12:40, 19 November 2022 (UTC)