Talk:Zero Hour (Star Trek: Enterprise)/GA1
Latest comment: 8 years ago by Miyagawa in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: BenLinus1214 (talk · contribs) 20:45, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
Hi there! I'll take this one. BenLinus1214talk 20:45, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
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@Miyagawa:
- Do you really need a citation on the guest stars?
- What music by Jay Chattaway?
- Normally I remove the music mentions due to a lack of sourcing, but in this case there actually is some - the mention of it in the article body is hidden down in Home Media Release which talks about the music for the episode being released on CD. Miyagawa (talk) 06:55, 15 June 2015 (UTC)
- You should really flip the first sentence of the lead per other television articles: "Zero Hour" is the twenty-fourth and final episode of the third season of the American science fiction television series Star Trek: Enterprise, and the seventy-seventh episode overall."
- Actor parentheticals?
- "The episode took eight days to film…" This sentence has two uses of the verb "to include"
- "The twist at the end of "Zero Hour"…" something goes weird at the end of this sentence.
- "Around 3.91" a little informal—maybe "roughly 3.91"
- "Executive producer Brannon Braga…" This sentence was a little confusing to me at first--maybe put that he thought "Zero Hour" was the third act in a three act play consisting of those other two episodes.
- In the second paragraph, probably put "Braga" instead of "Brannon" to make it sound less informal.
- In your source, I don't see that the actors weren't given the final pages of the script due to its "sensitive" nature.
- In the Bakula picture, I would make it clear that he eventually went back on his word--otherwise, it sounds kind of misleading.
- In the last production paragraph, either reformat it or avoid the "there were" construction in the second sentence that only has one person.
- Add an archive url and date on the ABC Medianet.