Talk:Zaharije Ostojić/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 21:30, 1 January 2013 (UTC)

• Lead: Immediately following the name, the dates of birth and death, if known, should be included.

• have added month of death, and am adding some more re his death.

• The lead should summarize the entire article. This lead needs to be expanded.

• I've had a crack at it, let me know what you think?

• A pretty substantial expansion is needed of his pre-World War II life. You have a date of birth, it needs to be sourced. In order for this to be a complete biography, it should include what can be found about his family and early life.

• PRODUCER has looked for sources in Serbo-Croat for this bloke, and there isn't much at all. There is now an early life section with his place and year of birth, but we don't even have a year for him joining the Yugoslav Air Force. I managed to find a reference to a notable brother-in-law, but there really is no other coverage available on his family or early life.

• The article is seriously lacking context. The infobox states his allegiance as the Chetniks, an anti-Axis organization, simultaneously to Nazi Germany. Which force was he loyal to, and explain a little about that force's allegiance in the war.

• I have removed the allegiance to the Germans and Italians as he personally didn't negotiate any agreements with either, although forces under his command fought alongside the Italians during Case White. I have added more context, let me know what you think?

• All of the details in the infobox need to be either sourced or included in the prose and sourced there.

• Done, I haven't been able to find his start date with the Air Force, so I've just left it as the WWII year range.

• "The conference was dominated by Đurišić and its resolutions expressed extremism and intolerance..." this is non-neutral language. You need to clarify who considers the resolutions to be extreme or intolerant.

• Have added quote and inline citation from Pavlowitch. I think it is consistent with other reliable sources, but I'm happy to use in-text attribution if you feel it's necessary.

• "pull the Chetniks back towards positions on the line of the Drina-Piva rivers, some 80–90 kilometres southwest of Jablanica." -- You'll need a convert template for all units of measurement.

• Done.

• Operation Weiss section mentions a "Colonel Bailey" who needs a first name.

• Done.

• 1943-44 section mentions a "Colonel McDowell" who also needs a first name.

• Done.

• Duplicate links tool returns one result: Drina

• Fixed.

• External links and disambiguation links tools return no problems. One image to illustrate the article which has a Fair Use rationale.
• No apparent stability or neutrality problems present.
• "Pavlowitch (2008)" -- This reference doesn't point to anything in the bibliography. It looks like you may have put in the wrong book, as the Pavlowitch (2007) reference points to no refs.

• perennial problem, too many editions, I've aligned them with my 2008 copy.

Placing the article on hold pending some pretty substantial improvements. —Ed!^(talk) 23:45, 1 January 2013 (UTC)

Thanks Ed. Have made some substantial changes to address your observations. Let me know if any of your comments haven't been addressed. Regards, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 11:51, 2 January 2013 (UTC)

I re-read the article, and the information you added was extremely helpful in establishing a little more context. The only other thing I would suggest: generally, one-paragraph sections are frowned upon (such as "Early life" and "Plans for the "march on Bosnia"") So I would suggest you combine or expand some of those sections. But I won't hold it for GA based solely on that, so I'm passing the article. Good work. —Ed!^(talk) 13:10, 2 January 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, Ed. Regards, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 13:52, 2 January 2013 (UTC)