Talk:Yugoslav monitor Sava/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 19:48, 31 October 2014 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:48, 31 October 2014 (UTC)

• No DABs and external links good.
• Break up the first sentence of the lede. I always like to orient the reader in the first sentence as to her class and type, who she was built for and when she was built. Then start introducing interesting details. So add when she was built to the first sentence and make a new sentence about firing the first shot of WWI.
  • Good suggestion. Done.
• Duplicate link for Belgrade.
  • fixed.
• Picture appropriately licensed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:50, 1 November 2014 (UTC)

Cheers, Peacemaker67 (crack... thump) 01:58, 2 November 2014 (UTC)

• • No rush, @Sturmvogel 66:, but I'm thinking about getting Morava up to speed for GA, along with a List of Yugoslav river monitors for my first crack at a good topic, and want to incorporate all the suggestions made thus far. Any more for any more? Regards, Peacemaker67 (crack... thump) 10:43, 11 November 2014 (UTC)
    • It's a good idea, but FLC won't accept a list of only four items; I've fought with them over the issue, but they're not budging. You could try and stretch the list by adding the 3 or 4 class articles, but, IMO, that would only work if we had extensive coverage of the changes made by the Yugoslavs to put in the class articles. But we don't so I don't think that that would really fly. I'm planning on a topic for all the Austro-Hungarian river monitors, which should be big enough to satisfy the informal FLC criteria. Although progress has been side-tracked by Europa Universalis IV.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:04, 11 November 2014 (UTC)