Talk:You're Mine (Eternal)/GA1
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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 06:15, 7 June 2015 (UTC)
After I finish writing the reviews for Talk:Kitten/GA1 and Talk:Bill Belichick/GA1, I will review this article. Snuggums (talk / edits) 06:15, 7 June 2015 (UTC)
- Okay thanks. — Calvin999 07:49, 8 June 2015 (UTC)
- Sure thing. Snuggums (talk / edits) 13:23, 8 June 2015 (UTC)
- Lead
- It's worth including UK R&B Chart since this reached the top 20 there
- I don't think Trey Songz's nationality is needed here
- Background and release
- "advise" → "advice"; American spelling should be used for an American subject
- "prior to singing the second single from Me. I Am Mariah... The Elusive Chanteuse, 'The Art of Letting Go'" → "prior to singing 'The Art of Letting Go' from Me. I Am Mariah... The Elusive Chanteuse"
- "Carey premiered 'You're Mine (Eternal)' as the third single to be released from the album" → "Carey released 'You're Mine (Eternal)' as the album's third single"
- I'm not sure if the bit on single artwork is necessary
- Composition
- "Rodney 'Darkchild' Jerkins" → Rodney Jerkins
- "Carey is reminiscing" → "Carey reminisces"
- "numerous" in "'You're Mine' garnered numerous comparisons" is unnecessary
- Since an MTV ref and a Time ref are used for citing that it was compared to "We Belong Together", I'd use their commentary here
- Critical reception
- What is "greenly" in "a greenly positive response" supposed to mean?
- Fuse (TV channel) shouldn't be italicized
- No commentary for Trey Songz's parts?
- Promotion
- I'm not sure if the time of day is necessary for when the music video premiered
- No reviews for the music video?
- References
- "U.S." isn't needed for the iTunes references
- The "!" is missing for Yahoo! Music
- See above note on Fuse
- "The" is part of the title for The Hollywood Reporter
- "News.radio.com" should simply read "Radio.com"
- Digital Spy shouldn't be italicized
- "Rap Up" should be hyphenated
- Overall
- Well-written?
- Prose quality: Decent, but needs improvements
- Manual of Style compliance: Almost
- Verifiable?
- Reference layout: Several need to be fixed
- Reliable sources: All good
- No original research: None detected
- Broad in coverage?
- Major aspects: Could be expanded in a few areas
- Focused: Some unnecessary details
- Neutral?: No bias found
- Stable?: Nothing of concern
- Illustrated, if possible, by images?
- Appropriate licensing: No copyright violations
- Relevance and captioning: I don't see the benefit of including File:Yunque waterfall.jpg. A screenshot of the music video would probably be better.