Talk:Yooka-Laylee/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Abryn (talk · contribs) 15:11, 25 August 2019 (UTC)

Starting review. - Bryn (talk) (contributions) 15:11, 25 August 2019 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments by Crimsonfox

I think Bryn and I must have started this at the same time and I only just realised they started the review so I'll just leave some comments here. If this isn't the way to do this then feel free to edit/move/message me. CrimsonFox ^talk 21:43, 25 August 2019 (UTC)

Images:

• The fair use rationale needs completing on File:Yookalaylee.jpg

Refs:

• Ref 1: Missing author
• Ref 28: Date, author and site name missing

General formatting:

• Per WP:£, you don't need to use the full currency signifier every time unless it's unclear.

Gameplay:

• Per WP:VGJARGON, this section focuses too much on the character/ability names as opposed to their function and should be cut down. See Banjo-Kazooie and how it generalises these to be more readable
• "to collect "Pagies": golden book pages that act as" - You don't need the quotes around "Pagies"

Development:

• ", the name of a boss from the second Banjo game, Banjo-Tooie," to ", the name of a character from Banjo-Tooie,"
• "the goal was reached within 40 minutes" - 38 minutes is listed in the release section, which is it?
• "Additional post-launch downloadable content is planned," - Has this been released now?
• "The game's native language is featured in English" to - "The game's native language is English"
• "This allowed for bugs to be more easily repaired and the incorporation of ten thousand polygons" - The mention of 10,000 doesn't seem worth mentioning as this would be normal. The general comment from the source was commenting on the speed of character development as opposed to the power of the game engine.
• "Shortly after Yooka-Laylee's release, Playtonic announced further updates to the game to address criticism of the in-game camera and controls while adding additional features and various other improvements." - Sort of sits on the line inbetween devlepment and release but I think it would fit better in the last paragraph of the release section to follow on from the comment about pushing the release back.

Release:

• There's some duplication of information regarding Kickstarter in the first paragraph which better suits the developmen section than release
• "In June 2018, Limited Run Games announced they are releasing physical copies for the Nintendo Switch in North America, starting in August 2018" - Probably should be "they would be releasing" as I assume it has already happened?
• The last paragtaph mentions the Wii U version after already stating it had been cancelled in the previous paragraph. It feels this paragraph should go before the second as it seems to go through events chronologically.

Spinoff and other appearances:

• The source doesn't mention Impossible Lair as a spinoff, just as a follow up but until there's more information about it, I would remove this section and leave the sequel note in the lead.

Comments by Abry

Co-op reviewing

• The comparison between Yooka-Laylee and Chameleon Twist is not cited, at least not immediately.
• Is it important to note Trowzer's pants?
• Link to role-playing game at RPG-style
• Is the post-launch content still planned or has it been released?
• It feels like the last paragraph in the Release section could be incorporated into the previous one.
• The Colm Ahern thing seems to read as if it is the WIkipedia article making the assertion about the target audience.