Talk:Yaoi/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: WhinyTheYounger (talk · contribs) 16:25, 27 December 2020 (UTC)

• @WhinyTheYounger: Hi, just wanted to inquire about the status of this review. Morgan695 (talk) 18:27, 3 January 2021 (UTC)
  • @Morgan695: Hi! Sorry for the delay—I let the holidays get to me. Should be ready within 48 hours! WhinyTheYounger (WtY)(talk, contribs) 19:15, 3 January 2021 (UTC)

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	The sentence The storyline where an uke is reluctant to have anal sex with a seme is considered to be similar to the reader's reluctance to have sexual contact with someone for the first time. needs rewording; is this reluctance a general feature of yaoi readers? a possible reason some find it relatable? That was a carry-over from an old version of the article that feels like a spurious point; I've removed it and re-arranged the section. Make sure glossing is consistent. Most terms, like fujoshi and bara, are given with their Japanese and literal glosses, but dojinshi does not. I think I've corrected all of them now. It may be a good idea to divid the "General" subsection of "Analysis" into something about the controversy and/or politics of yaoi as opposed to the generic title used now Done. Y
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	Y
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	Citation 84, for the sentence A 2017 survey by yaoi publisher Juné Manga found that... does not support the claims made in the sentence. It appears to be a reference mixup—the URL links to a different article from the title in the citation. Link fixed. Direct quotes from longer sources like Zanghellini should ideally have a citation with a specific number, such for the sentence Zanghellini suggests that the samurai archetype... Ditto, However, McLelland says that authors... There are a few other examples—overall, make sure anything with a direct quotation is cited a page number in longer works I think I've caught all of them now. Citation 98, to "fujyoshi.jp", appears to have changed/the archive doesn't seem actually be an archived link Replaced with a better quality source. The page numbers in the reference for Suzuki 1999 appear inaccurate Fixed. Full citation needed for 115, it's a journal article Done. Y
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	Y
	2c. it contains no original research.	Y
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	Y
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	Two things stand out: first, the lack of a Japan subsection under "Live-action television and film"—do these not exist in Japan? If so, or if they are less prominent, a short section to that effect seems needed at least. Done. Some of the figures are rather out of date. Ideally, newer data for Demographics should be located, if it exists. This was a struggle when updating the article; I've added a sentence from Suzuki noting that demographic analyses of BL media is limited. Y
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	Y
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	Y
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	Y
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	Y
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	Y
	7. Overall assessment.	Having corrected the above issues, I believe this article now fully meets the Good Article criteria. Well done!

@Morgan695: Well done! Happy to answer any questions, and this is my first GA review, so do let me know if you I messed up on my end. WhinyTheYounger (WtY)(talk, contribs) 05:51, 5 January 2021 (UTC)

@WhinyTheYounger: Hi, responses to your edits are above. Morgan695 (talk) 19:00, 5 January 2021 (UTC)

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