Talk:Vanitas (The Case Study of Vanitas)
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The result was: promoted by Styyx (talk) 21:14, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
- ... that Vanitas' personality was inspired by Sherlock Holmes? Source: https://ddnavi.com/interview/808972/a/
- Reviewed: Heart Gear
- Comment: Alt 2: Vanitas was given the voice of Natsuki Hanae due to his multiple talents and the idea of the protagonist given more sex appeal?
Created by Tintor2 (talk). Self-nominated at 03:14, 23 July 2022 (UTC).
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Hook eligibility:
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- The source provided backs up the first hook but not the alt hook. - Interesting: - See below.
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Reviewing this because you reviewed my nomination. The first hook I do not find interesting at all; Sherlock Holmes is a very well-known work and has inspired many series. The second hook can be interesting, but it needs to be re-written. Perhaps this would be better: "ALT 1: ... that Natsuki Hanae was chosen to voice Vanitas to give the character more sexual appeal?" Additionally, since you have more than five prior DYK nominations, you must review another nomination or link to a nomination you previously reviewed. In the article, the source for the fact must be placed at the end of the sentence with the fact per WP:DYKCRIT 3b. Link20XX (talk) 04:06, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
@Link20XX: Okay how about: "ALT 1: ... that Natsuki Hanae was chosen to voice Vanitas to give the character more sexual appeal?"[1] The last review I was the one from Heart Gear hereTintor2 (talk) 13:53, 23 July 2022 (UTC)
- "ALT 2: ...that Vanitas wears a hour glass-like earring that symbollizes his limited lifespan?[2]
References
- ^ セクシーかつ上品な『ヴァニタス』の妙味は、どのようにもたらされたのか──TVアニメ『ヴァニタスの手記』板村智幸（監督）インタビュー. DDNavi (in Japanese). September 23, 2021. Retrieved January 29, 2022.
- ^ Silverman, Rebecca (April 2, 2022). "Episode 24 - Case Study of Vanitas Season 2". Anime News Network. Retrieved July 7, 2022.
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Reviewer: TeenAngels1234 (talk · contribs) 18:32, 28 July 2022 (UTC)
I'm gonna review this article. Stay tuned.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 18:32, 28 July 2022 (UTC)
@Tintor2: Okay, then. Sorry, mea culpa. I was extremely busy. So. The article looks fine. Just:
- "Mochizuki regards Vanitas to be an eccentric and believes Vanitas is popular is because readers also have a certain interior". It seems more appropriate in Characterisation.
- Moved.
- "..Kaito Ishikawa's plays are compliments". Ishikawa is Noé voice actor, right? I would specify it. What does 'compliments' means? 'Complementary' is probably better, no?
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""Hanae makes full use of all the cool, uncool, and sexy parts to bring out the charm of Vanitas". Maybe 'he tried to make' is better.
- Done
- I would simplify 'Appearances: The Case Study of Vanitas' a bit.
- Done
- "Comic Book Resources said Vanitas' relationships are complex because he initially treats Jeanne and the more they interact, other characters appear to have similar feelings, which confuses the audience as a result of Noé's possible jealousy of them". The sentence seems unclear to me, and in general it sounds unremarkable.
- Removed
- "Vanitas' change from fighting Jeanne into forcing a kiss with her was criticized for failing to reach comedy in the place of a seemingly scary scene because of the discomfort he generates in Jeanne when he suddenly announces his unconditional love". Can you simplify this?
- Done.
- "A writer from Comic Book Resources said when Vanitas is feeding Jeanne, he trying to heal her after he learns she is also a victim of a curse". Is this important?
Thats' all.
- Removed.
@TeenAngels1234: Thanks for the comments.Tintor2 (talk) 22:12, 4 August 2022 (UTC) @TeenAngels1234: I trimmed the appearanes section. Tell me if it should be smaller.Tintor2 (talk) 01:17, 7 August 2022 (UTC)
- "Deciving Wind". You mean "Deceiving"?
- Revised
- "but is a bothered". Is the "a" necessary?
- Removed
- "Jeanne into forcing a kiss with her was criticized being inappropiate as comedy". Maybe "as being inappropriate" is better.
- Revised.
@Tintor2: That's all. Good work.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 10:17, 7 August 2022 (UTC) @TeenAngels1234: Done.Tintor2 (talk) 14:26, 7 August 2022 (UTC)
- Good article. Clear prose; good pictures. Good exposition. Exhaustive on the subject. Promoted.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 20:27, 7 August 2022 (UTC)